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Kersal Moor edit

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because WP:GM would like to see this article reach WP:GA status.

Thanks, --Jza84 |  Talk  14:42, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Nice article on what looks to be a ver interesting place. Here are some suggestions to help improve it.

  • You might want to try using {{wide image}} for the panorama, instead of squeezing it into the infobox. Put it at the end maybe? For an example, see Black Moshannon State Park
  • The lead needs to be expanded to summarize the whole article - not much of the history is in the lead or no mention of literary references. See WP:LEAD
  • Units should be both metric and English throughout (now has hectares only for example) The {{convert}} template is useful
  • Needs more references - the Geography is not cited after the first sentence, or Waugh's poem is not cited (all direct quotes need refs). See WP:CITE
  • Plants are briefly mentioned in Geography, but there should be more on animals and plants there.
  • The history section especially has several short one or two sentence paragraphs - these should be combined or expanded. The section is also long and could be divided into subsections.
  • Nude Male Races to meet your spouse - too bad this was not in the April Fools DYK!
  • Internet refs need url, title, publisher, author if known, and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be useful here
  • No History after 1890?
  • Two poems are quoted in the history - should they be in the Literary refs section?
  • No mention of the Rangers etc. from the lead.
  • Needs at least a locator map within Great Britain, would be great if a more detailed map could be made.

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:36, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]