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I've listed this article for peer review because it is a good article that needs improvement.

Thanks, Raj2004 (talk) 19:24, 16 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The lead does not summarize the article completely, there is lot of new info in the lead, the quote should be moved.
I have never seen a sentence as a section title "Bad karma can be mitigated."
References
- 5 : "Editors of Hinduism Today. What is Hinduism?" needs date, pp. no
- 8, 16, 17, 19, 20, 23, 24, 28, 38, 39: NOT really WP:RSs
- 6, 7, 40-45 : page nos needed, with publisher info, date
- 21: Verses 4:14, 9.22 and 18.61 text name???

The review is incomplete, just went through lead and ref.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 11:15, 18 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"The Vedas tell us that if we sow goodness, we will reap goodness" "karma literally means "deed or act" and more broadly names the universal principle of cause and effect" This info is repeated in the same section twice.
Sanchita (accumulated), Prarabdha (fruit-bearing) and Kriyamana (current) karma, this info is discussed twice in two diff sections
Give dates of scholars or theologian, whose views are referred to. e.g. 1520–1593 CE found to be given in context of Appaya Dikshita
Views of some people are given, do they encompass the views of the whole branch? e.g. do views of Appaya Dikshita imply views of Shaivism in general?
"Relation with caste" has WP:OR . Krishna talks about duties, NOT karma. So this does not approve or disapprove "many interpret the caste system in accordance with karma, as those with good deeds are born into a spiritual family, which is synonymous with the brahmana caste." Also, the sentence needs a reference, who says "many interpret". --Redtigerxyz (talk) 08:20, 19 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The part related to "Axel Michaels" in the lead... can it be merged with the main body? ideally the lead should provide a brief overview. see WP:LEAD.

" Bad karma can be mitigated." consider changing the title. Let the "mitigated" part be described in the content, not the tile.

"Gita interpretations and role of Guru" , I think the title should be "Gita's interpretation and role of Guru"

"Some interpretations of certain verses in the Bhagavad Gita" is a weasel word, consider rewording for clarity.

"Relation with caste" , this should be "Relation with varna", note that caste system is different from the varnas as described in Gita.

Will go thru in detail when I get time, Thanks. — Nvineeth ^talk 13:27, 18 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Many portions of the article were not written by me, so please correct.

Thanks,

Raj2004 (talk) 23:57, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]