Wikipedia:Peer review/Jud Süß (1940 film)/archive2

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am planning to submit it as a Featured Article candidate and would like to get suggestions for getting it to meet the criteria for Featured Articles.

Thanks, Pseudo-Richard (talk) 07:58, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • "...of the most anti-Semitic films ..." why the capital S and hyphen? Opening sentence used "antisemitic", be internally consistent.
  • I would link Terra Filmkunst because it's not clear to non-experts that this is a company, not an individual.
  • Consider linking Reichsmark.
  • "Susan Tegel[who?]" needs to be resolved, I'm guessing it's a case of "who is she and why should her opinion be important?"
  • Consider linking Diet (assembly).
  • "As his carriage gets into an accident" not particularly elegant. "As his carriage is involved in an accident" perhaps?
  • "Duke's bodyguard, opera and ballet as well" the Duke's opera? the Duke's ballet?
  • "but also causing " -> "but causes"
  • "of Duke Karl Alexander of Württemberg in Stuttgart. As a financial advisor for Duke Karl Alexander, Duke of Württemberg, he " repetitive and overlinked.
  • "Court Jew" or "court Jew", and link only the first instance.
  • "which he refused to do" just "which he refused" is sufficient.
  • "the Nazi takeover" of where?
  • "Goebbels was insisting in" Goebbels insisted in.
  • Link pogrom.
  • "against the Jews. [21][22] " remove the space before the refs.
  • No link for Central Rio?
  • "the lead role of Joseph Süß Oppenheimer included the title role " lead role... title role...
  • René Deltgen has a diacritic.
  • Why are Final solution and Jewish question in italics?
  • If possible, try to avoid squashing text between images.
  • Several short paragraphs, try merging them for a more appealing appearance and flow.
  • "The film is available for sale on VHS from Facets" presumably not everywhere though.
  • Whitespace before the Analysis section.
  • "List of German films 1933-1945" needs an en-dash in that year range.
  • Avoid SHOUTING in the ref titles.
  • If you use a source more than twice, make it a general reference and then you can just cite the author name and page number rather than repeat the title, ISBN etc etc each and every time.
  • Ref 111 has no access date, publisher etc.
  • New York Times is The New York Times. Also that ref has different date format.
  • Ref 115 is Spiegelonline but has no link, and has different format date from other refs.

The Rambling Man (talk) 08:10, 3 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]