Wikipedia:Peer review/Jordanhill railway station/archive1

Jordanhill railway station edit

Not that there aren't already enough eyes reviewing this page, but we might as well add a few more. -- user:zanimum

~~Generally speaking, I can't see TOO much, although it would be nice to get another image or two. Deckiller 23:55, 2 March 2006 (UTC)~~[reply]

I'd like to see some comparison of its importance relative to other train stations in Scotland as well as in/around Glasgow. For example: "In SRA's 2002/3 financial year, 85,861 people boarded trains at Jordanhill station, and 94,613 alighted." Does that make it the 4th-most-frequented railway station in the country, the 104th-most-frequented, or what? Andrew Levine 02:28, 3 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Alighted? Why haven't they closed the station yet if people burst into flames there? Maybe it's because I'm not native English speaking, but maybe another word would be useful. - 131.211.210.15 08:54, 3 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I agree, it's a dorky word. I forget what I had originally wrote. What could replace it? "where people got off Scotrail"? -- user:zanimum

It's not dorky, just a little dialectic. How about "disembarked?" Same syllables, more letters. --James S. 19:47, 3 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Done. -- user:zanimum

I'd say there's a couple of unecessary images in the article. I don't see the need for a mock-up of the rail totem at the station, for example, nor a photo of a very anonymous and typical ticket machine. smurrayinchester^{(User), (Talk)} 15:29, 3 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- Consider the lack of replacements, I believe that's why they were in there. The ticket image could just go to the general Scotrail article, I guess. However, I personally support the sign illustration, it is like a logo for the station. -- user:zanimum
The gallery should go on Commons. Johnleemk | Talk 16:08, 3 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- There is a copy of the gallery in Commons. I think the intent was to let people discovering Wikipedia see more graphic content than normal. -- user:zanimum
In the "Nearby attractions" section, consider adding prose that describes the station's relationship with the attraction. For example, the school was opened near the station x years after it was built, the station is used by students from communityx going to the campus which is x km from the station, this makes it busy in the morning between 8 and 9 as it is serviced by more trains and so on. --maclean25 19:30, 3 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, fair enough, but just make sure that the sentences thus created are grammatical and written in British English. The User above requested additional info, not just changing a list to prose and subtracting info, eg a link! Scottish universities have faculties, not departments, and the universities are never, never, ever called "schools" (although occasionally faculties may be called schools).--Mais oui! 21:08, 6 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
This article could use some kind of infobox to help organize some of the information. Tarret 14:42, 5 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]