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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I believe it's informative, well-written, well-interlinked with other articles, and well-referenced. I can't find any major problems with it myself, but want a second opinion before promoting it to good article status.
Thanks, Eshlare (talk) 18:02, 28 April 2012 (UTC)
- Man, is there anything John Barrowman isn't in any more? I'll give this a skim; if you're only going to GA status with it then it pretty much looks good to go. Ping me if you want to chase it further and I'll give it a more comprehensive look for you.
- "PR" shouldn't be abbreviated the first time you use it; it may be a common term but it's still more encyclopedic to have it expanded at first mention.
- Fixed.
- "Torchwood, a group of renegades" -> renegades in the context of what? I've never seen the show but I always had the impression it was a UK Fringe kind of thing, maybe the actual role of Torchwood could be briefly touched upon here.
- In the context of being unaffiliated with any organisation, and whose mission involves working against the government/CIA. Put in about two being ex-alien hunters and two being ex-CIA agents. Think that should cover it.
- "coldheartedly" -> could be mistaken but I believe that's two words, maybe one hyphenated.
- had a quick search, and the most common form of styling seems to be hyphenated.
- "Some-time" -> "Some time"
- Done.
- Refs 1-6 are episode citations; list the roles of the personnel mentioned (I'm assuming they're writers/directors, so specify which is which; Episode 2 (Twin Peaks) has a few examples of how I tend to format that)
- Added in.
- Given that you mention the BBC site was revamped at one stage, it's definitely worth archiving it (WebCite should work) for future retention in case this happens again.
- Done.
- I've cited Todd VanDerWerff quite a few times in television articles, I've never seen him space his surname at any position he's written for. I'd suggest sticking with how he parses it.
- Done. Probably an oversight seeing as I'd noted it without spaces in the references.
- When you mention that Ambrose received a Saturn nod, you could expand that out a little by listing who eventually won that one (if you cite the Saturn Award homepage, archive the URL manually as they change it yearly and their own archives are bloody terrible).
- Awards are yet to take place. I've indicated that for just now. Obviously once they take place I'll remove the reference to the exact day of the year etc. Didn't want to make the reference to the nomination too big, but it's best not to confuse. It's an external news article, so should be okay.
- "PR" shouldn't be abbreviated the first time you use it; it may be a common term but it's still more encyclopedic to have it expanded at first mention.
- With those changes made, I'd be happy to have passed this at GAN no bother, so you shouldn't have any difficulty taking it there. GRAPPLE X 13:23, 1 May 2012 (UTC)