Wikipedia:Peer review/Illinois/archive1

Illinois edit

Request any advice to improve Illinois article to Featured article status. Thanks in advance. --Dual Freq 03:16, 26 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

It looks pretty decent overall. I suggest comparing to the good articles on California and Rhode Island for ideas about where this page could be improved. The only part that may be objectionable is the somewhat lengthy list of famous residents near the end. The demographics section probably should have some citations for the data sources. Thanks. — RJH (talk) 17:29, 26 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Found most sources for demographics data. Attempted to trim list of famous persons, but encountered resistance. Any ideas for an ideal list? Dual Freq 05:00, 29 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per WP:MOSNUM, at Units of measurement, numbers with SI units of measure should have conversions in US customary units and vice versa. These conversions should keep to similar values of precision. For example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth". Note that the converted unit of measure uses a standard abbreviation, while the source unit is spelled out in the text.
    • I believe all these are taken care of, please point it out if I have missed one. Dual Freq 05:00, 29 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per WP:MOSNUM, there should be a no-break space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
    • I believe all these are taken care of, please point it out if I have missed one. Dual Freq 05:00, 29 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • This article may be a bit list-weighty; in other words, some of the lists should be converted to prose (paragraph form).
  • For a 42 kb article, more than just 11 footnotes will be necessary for FA status.
    • There are now 17 footnotes, what is the rule of thumb for size vs footnote number? Dual Freq 05:00, 29 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Dates should use either 0 or 2 commas, depending upon the subject of the article; American-related articles should use 2 commas, while British-related articles generally used 0 commas. For example, for two commas: In January 15, 2006, this and that happened, while for zero commas, use: In January 15 2006 this and that happened.
    • I believe all these are taken care of, please point it out if I have missed one. Dual Freq 05:00, 29 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • As is done in WP:FOOTNOTE, for footnotes, the footnote should be located right after the punctuation mark, such that there is no space inbetween. For example, change blah blah [2]. to blah blah.[2]
    • I believe these are done as well. Dual Freq 05:00, 29 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you both for your prompt and helpful comments. I expect to be able to correct the footnote location and MOSNUM problems very soon. The article has been list heavy for quite some time, revision 48357023 is an example of those lists. I've made a couple attempts to trim the famous person list, but it keeps coming back I'm not sure how to tactfully remove it or trim it to an acceptable size. Would <10 names be acceptable, or would total removal of the list and conversion to prose be required? Several of the images seem to be boilerplate wikiproject US state images. I wasn't sure if I could remove them and still be in line with all the other states. Again, thank you for taking time to review the article. --Dual Freq 04:04, 27 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I have attempted to correct the previously mentioned problem. Are there anymore suggestions? Is this article ready for FAC? Thanks again. --Dual Freq 05:00, 29 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]