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Hurricane Ginger edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I intend to take it to FAC somewhat soon, and I'd like a fresh set of eyes before I take it all the way up.

Thanks, ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:56, 16 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The storm developed in a large region of convection across the Gulf of Mexico and western Atlantic - This would usually imply that a surface low developed out of a persistent convective complex, which is contradictory to the MH, which states Ginger originated in an upper-level low which moved to the surface.
On September 14 Ginger slowed - I usually like to see commas being used sparingly, but it looks weird without one here.
The semicolon in that line seems to serve little purpose other than to forcefully adjoin two sentences.
I would link soybean.
Further north, moderate rainfall and winds spread through the Mid-Atlantic states - "Rainfall" usually means the precipitation that has already been produced (ie. rainfall at Raleigh reached 4 in), while "rain" is the meteorological phenomena.
the feature was caused by an anticyclone - The ULL or the mimic-ITCZ was caused by the high?

Just a few preliminary comments from the first few paragraphs. Juliancolton (talk) 17:56, 16 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]