Wikipedia:Peer review/History of Burnside/archive1

History of Burnside edit

This article details the history of Burnside, a local government area in the Adelaide Metropolitan Region, South Australia. It is comprehensive, well referenced and spans from Aboriginal history to the present day. michael ^talk 04:32, 9 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The lead is pretty dense. Try breaking it down into two or three paragraphs for readability, and reword to eliminate "This article details the..." :-) --NormanEinstein 17:43, 10 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers for that. I've broken the intro paragraph in two, but I've restored the image sizes - most viewers are not wikipedia users and unable to adjust their image size preferences. I'll take any suggestions for rewording the intro sentence. I'm stumped personally. michael ^talk 12:56, 12 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]