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Half-Life 2: Episode One

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to bring it to FA status one day. Gary King (talk) 20:48, 14 October 2008 (UTC)

• Boy, don't sound so glum... "one day..." :P Images:

• • Image:Half-Life 2 Episode One Citadel Base.jpg can use a {{Non-free image rationale}} like those at Image:Plante firstmask.jpg to reduce redundancies in the templates.

• • The cover should be reduced in size to 256 px width. Otherwise they meet criteria. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^(talk) 21:03, 14 October 2008 (UTC)

All done Gary King (talk) 21:13, 14 October 2008 (UTC)

On a side note, you might want to beef up the rationales, especially the gameplay image- how does it increase our understanding fo the work? The barebones one-liner wouldn't satisfy Elco, so just be warned :P Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^(talk) 02:32, 15 October 2008 (UTC)

• Comments
• Can you add any more information to ref #29, such as author or page number? Same with ref #33, #41.
• Otherwise, sources look good. –Juliancolton ^{Tropical Cyclone} 02:25, 15 October 2008 (UTC)

I don't have access to those at the moment. I'll see if I can, and then add them when I get them. Gary King (talk) 02:32, 15 October 2008 (UTC)

• "in and around the war-torn city of City 17" - avoid repetition of city. Giggy (talk) 21:06, 15 October 2008 (UTC)

  Done Gary King (talk) 02:27, 16 October 2008 (UTC)

• I've done some light editing (rm overlinking, et al), and also left some inline comments. Check my edits; I had to edit an old copy offline, so I might have reverted some recent changes. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^(talk) 02:28, 16 October 2008 (UTC)

  Thanks, I'll look it over tomorrow (because I'm tired right now) and then get back to you on here. Gary King (talk) 03:51, 16 October 2008 (UTC)

  Alright I think I've addressed all of your concerns. Gary King (talk) 18:54, 16 October 2008 (UTC)

  Yeah, that looks better. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^(talk) 19:00, 16 October 2008 (UTC)