Wikipedia:Peer review/Great Retreat/archive1

Great Retreat edit

I have put this up for a peer review because I think it is a good start for FA status. I would love any feedback you have to make this article better. Spawn Man 04:05, 21 September 2005 (UTC) Take your time...[reply]

It looks a decent start, but I actually thing this page could be merged with the First Battle of the Marne, as a preliminary to the main battle. Nearly half of the Great Retreat page appears to be concerned with the actual Marne battle itself. (The Marne Battle page is in need of serious expansion, due to its importance.) If not merged, then the marne part of the page should be covered by the First Battle of the Marne, and the actual retreat portion expanded. I think "1st army" should be "1st Army"; "River Marne" should be linked to Marne River rather than Marne. Since there were Belgian, British, French, and German forces involved along this part of the flank, it is important to distinguish to which army you are referring. For example, II Corps should be British II Corps. Finally this page needs linking in to Western Front (World War I). It is also in need of references and ref. tags. Thanks. :) — RJH 18:42, 1 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Bob. The Great Retreat is probably going to stay put, mainly because it is a campaign page, rather than a battle page, (Maubeuge, the Marne, Le Cateau etc, are all part of the Retreat to the Marne Campaign. The Retreat to the Marne campaign link led to the Great Retreat article title. I will definitely take your advice on the other stuff though. Thanks for the feedback. Spawn Man 03:26, 4 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]