Wikipedia:Peer review/Gifu, Gifu/archive1

Gifu, Gifu edit

The whole history section is a bit uneven and I'm looking for more sources, but any advice on any section would be wonderful. Is there a subtopic that still needs to be covered?Douggers 02:04, 28 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm. I think it looks pretty good, but a lot of the sections are a bit too short - I kept feeling a little lost, as things were mentioned without much context - e.g. manufacture of fire balloons without mentioning what they were, the clans and such in the Warring States period without much context about the clans or people mentioned, etc. Expand things out a bit for us dummies and you'll have quite a good article on your hands. Adam Cuerden talk 19:30, 2 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Hey, thanks for your input. I promise that I'm working on it. Whenever I try to clear things up, though, I end up referring to a Japanese article and get sidetracked while translating that into a new English article. Douggers 03:15, 4 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]