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Geography of Newfoundland and Labrador

The article is dreadfully written. Among the problems that I could point out are:

• atrocious grammar and syntax leading to incomprehensibility in places;
• preposterous diction which would do a bureaucrat proud;
• use of unexplained technical terms that make reading difficult for the uninitiated;
• use of Imperial measurements throughout without conversions to SI.
• at least one reference to a thing that doesn't exist (namely the railway -- that packed up years ago).

It's a big job, and I may get around to it myself someday. Right now, though, this is an AWFUL article.Kelisi 01:44, 11 July 2007 (UTC)

I agree completely. I will do what I can.Silverchemist 06:07, 15 July 2007 (UTC)

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 16:00, 20 July 2007 (UTC)

Comments

• Please rename or eliminate the heading under Climate: Notes about the graphs. If I was just to look at the table of contents for some interesting reading, this just doesn't make any sense. As it turns out it is just a footnote type clarification, so should not be part of the outline of the whole article. It is not a subject to be introduced in the introduction for example.

• Also under the section of Climate, their should either be no sub sections as one sentence should have an expand tag. So reword the Climate to prose, without sub headings, or expand the short guys. Same with the Section Industry and Economy. the sub sections are itsy bitsy, so the main section could be written as prose, or the subs filled out.

• Rephrase the sentence with i.e. Labrador is an irregular shape: the western part of its border with Quebec is drainage divide for the Labrador Peninsula i.e. land drained by rivers that flow into the Atlantic Ocean are part of Labrador, the rest belongs to Quebec. and don't use i.e.

• Section Fresh Water is not referenced, however, the majority of the article is wonderfully referenced for the most part which is nice to see.

• Coyotes are a very recent addition to the fauna of Newfoundland, possibly crossing the ice from Cape Breton Island in the 1980s possibly? did they or didn't they. As an encyclopedia, state what happened. or why you have added it here. this expert...proposes that...or a theory by this university is that coyotes... Give it some substance or don't mention it.

• Section Population could relate current demographics, and population size, and urban areas/major placenames.

• Is there any thing happening in relation to Zoogeography or Biogeography

• As far as the coverage of the topic geography of this place, the notable items are covered, and referenced.

• Are there any national parks?

• The references don't appear consistent- sometimes the URL shows, sometimes the web page title. SriMesh | talk 04:45, 26 October 2007 (UTC)