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General Dynamics F-16 Fighting Falcon

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I've listed this article for peer review because the article pretty much meets the "The perfect article" criteria. It has recently been promoted to GA status, and I'm wondering what areas the article need to be improved. I think that, with some effort and collaboration, it can achieve FA status quite easily.

Thanks, Sp33dyphil ^{Ready • to • Rumble} 06:48, 9 April 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments This looks pretty good to me, here are some suggestions for improvement with an eye to FAC. Thanks for your work on this.

• The External link checker in the toolbox on this page finds 9 or more ELs that are dead or problematic and will need to be fixed before FAC.
• The same toolbox has a disambiguation link finder which finds one dab link (may be the dab at the top of the article??)
• I did some minor copyedits as I read - please revert if I introduced errors or made things worse.
• Abbreviations like GD need to be spelled out on first use, so "General Dynamics (GD)"
• I think this needs a ref right after the period per WP:MOSQUOTE: ACF also raised the stakes for GD and Northrop because it brought in further competitors intent on securing the lucrative order that was touted at the time as “the arms deal of the century”.
• Why does the Overview section have no references? I think it needs them.
• Operational history, United States needs more refs too.
• I would combine the two short paragraphs for Pakistan in Operational history. Also not sure if it would be better to have a Pakistan and other nations section here.
• If Yonatan Begin did not survive the crash (seems like he did not), I would say so explicitly
• Does the Notable appearances in media really meet WP:Summary style? Why not just make it a See also link instead?
• Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 04:43, 24 April 2011 (UTC)