Wikipedia:Peer review/Fremantle Prison/archive1

Fremantle Prison edit

Fremantle Prison is a world heritage site with an extensive and interesting history. The article has been edited by a prison tour guide currently employed at the prison and has benefited by the many great facts and images donated by this Wikipedia editor with lots of personal knowledge of the site. Many other editors have also contributed their knowledge to bring this article to where it stands today. Any feedback on how we may improve this article in an attempt to gain featured status is welcome. -- Longhair 08:17, 17 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Lead should be longer. AndyZ 20:52, 19 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I am glad a tour guide helped with this. First-hand knowledge of a subject really adds a special level of understanding that you just cannot get from reading books. Here are some specific comments:
- I would like to know more about its origin.
- what does "transportation ceased" mean? Does this refer to the transferring of prisoners from Britain to Fremantle?
- "The water was of very good quality..." is an opinion so it needs a reference.
- Avoid empty sections like "History" and "Prison operation".
- A floor layout plan would be nice.
- The "1900s" and "Prison art" are weak, they could use some discussion/details.
- Here are some resources that may help with further writing: Section A.2.2.2, [1] and [2]. I suspect there would be many books in an Austrailian library that could help immensely. --maclean25 08:39, 22 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good, but it's "too short". Try to expand it - double the current size would be nice.--Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus ^Talk 02:10, 23 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]