Wikipedia:Peer review/Ford Taurus/archive1

Ford Taurus edit

I submitted this article to become a featured article, and it failed. I fixed many of the problems that were brought up from there, and I am hoping for this article to get reviewed so I and my fellow wikipedians can edge it closer to becoming a featured article! --Karrmann

Two things jumped out at me during a quick skim (I'll go more in-depth when I have a moment); one is major and the other minor. If you're going to use POV phrases like "Not surprisingly, it actually turned out to be the exact opposite," you must explain to whom it's "not surprising" and include a citation therefor. Also, since the possessive is pronounced with an extra syllable (like the plural "Tauruses"), you add an "s" after the apostrophe: "Taurus's". (A lot of people miss this one; it depends how the word sounds without a plural or possessive. Example: "I went to Mr. Jones' house to see if the Taurus's starter was fixed.") Also, I fixed the spelling of "Continental" in the infobox. I'll do a more thorough read later. Radio Kirk talk to me 03:05, 26 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I've made a couple of quick edits to start with: Encyclopedias don't say things like "note that"—they present facts. I've also given a new name to the first category (again, "beliefs" of whom isn't cited, and "beliefs" was misspelled, anyway [grin]). The article's structure is very good and easily readable, save for the occasional minor formatting problem and the need for spell-checking. The most important work to do will be either removing or citing statements that are POV. Good job otherwise; you're close! Radio Kirk talk to me 03:29, 26 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The image 1989 Ford Taurus is not very useful. Forever young 05:53, 26 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]
"Introduction" section: Spends too much time talking about Chrysler and not enough talking about the pre-release development of the Taurus, which is what the section should be about. The last paragraph is the only one that matters, but it needs to be re-written, to avoid phrases like "this was rejected for obvious reasons". Pc13 10:01, 26 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]
"1986-1991" section: This phrase is incorrect: "The Taurus ultimately led to a design revolution that saw the end of the 'boxy' cars of the 1970s and 1980s". Ford had already started that "revolution" in 1982, in Europe, with the Ford Sierra, and less boxy cars were already becoming commonplace in Europe when the Taurus debuted. The comments can be kept, but needs to be more geographically localized. The engine paragraph needs to be trimmed down (too many "to"), by removing the SHO, which already has its own description two parapraphs below. Pc13 10:01, 26 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]
"1992-1995" section: Needs an expansion. More about the chassis, maybe. But since this only appears to be a restyling and not a completely new model (was there any change in wheelbase dimensions?), it could become a subsection named "1992 redesign". Pc13 10:01, 26 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]
"1996-1999" section: Not much to be done here. The phrase "was very impressive", about the SHO, needs to be re-written, to highlights differences between the V8 and the previous V6. And the controversial "Separation of the camshaft from its sprocket has been implicated in a growing number of catastrophic failures of this engine around the 50,000 mile mark" needs a proper source". Pc13 10:01, 26 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]
"2000-2006" section: Too many repeated words at the beginning ("Also, also, also"). Uh, the Taurus doesn't have four wheel disc brakes? A car that size, with rear drum brakes? Needs more information about the cost-cutting, more likely in the standard/optional features (which should not talk about the brakes, these aren't features, they're tech spec info). Pc13 10:01, 26 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]
"End" section: This phrase is irrelevant: "New 2006 models can still be found on eBay." And the "mixed sales success" section needs to be renamed "export models". The "awards" section can be removed and the information presented therein moved to the appropriate model sections. Pc13 10:01, 26 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]