Wikipedia:Peer review/Flood (Halo)/archive1

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take it to FAC again; comments on layout, content, et al are appreciated.

Thanks, Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 20:59, 9 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Giggy comments
  • I think there are a few more parameters on Template:Infobox VG character that could be filled in.
  • "For Halo 3, Vic DeLeon..." - context; who's he?
  • Check the italics on the ref 1 title.
  • "The Flood were added early in the development stage of Halo: Combat Evolved, before the game had made its jump from the Macintosh platform and Bungie was bought by Microsoft; a design for one Flood form appeared as early as 1997" - this needs reorganising; it's all over the place and hard to make sense of.
  • "ringworld Halo" - should Halo have italics here? It varies.
  • "takes place at the same times as the Master Chief hunts for Keyes during Halo: Combat Evolved" --> "takes place at the same time as the Master Chief's hunt for Keyes during Halo: Combat Evolved"?
  • In the Halo Graphic Novel section, one story is in italics, the other in quotes. Be consistent.
  • "Whereas the Flood are only hinted at being intelligent in Halo" - as in, throughout the series?
  • "Actress Aisha Tyler said that "[every time the Flood appear], even though I've played it a million times, is a totally terrifying moment." - what makes her an RS on video games?
  • What makes http://www.teamfremont.com/reviews/Halo2.shtml reliable?
  • Same for Gamecritics.com

Giggy 07:20, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

  • You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC. The sourcing looks good.
Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 13:14, 12 July 2008 (UTC)