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I've listed this article for peer review because I am hoping to get it to FA status. I have already had 1 unsuccessful attempt at it but I think it has lots of potential. Thanks, LOVI33 21:18, 24 September 2020 (UTC)
- NOTE, when you close this peer review, please be sure to remove it from Template:FAC peer review sidebar. If FA regulars have to do all the maintenance, they may stop following that very useful sidebar :) Good luck, SandyGeorgia (Talk) 18:47, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
- SandyGeorgia will do. Thanks for taking this on! LOVI33 22:11, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
Comments from SG edit
I will get to this soon, but in the meantime, please see:
- Mike Christie's excellent essay about how to improve reception sections
- Tony's exercises for tightening your prose at User:Tony1/How to improve your writing and User:Tony1/Redundancy exercises: removing fluff from your writing
- My general advice at User:SandyGeorgia/Achieving excellence through featured content SandyGeorgia (Talk) 22:21, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
- You can install this script to convert faulty hyphens to WP:ENDASHes.
- You can install this script to keep your dates in order.
- WP:MSH don't repeat words in lower-level headings: [1]
- MOS:CAPTIONS sentence fragments do not have final punctuation.
- When citing a source in a foreign language, you should give the actual (non-English) title, and provide a translation of that title by using the trans-title parameter in the citation template.
- Eleven uses of the word "also", see Tony's redundancy reducing exercises.
- Is it possible to reduce the WP:CITATION OVERKILL? Sample: The track makes use of a percolating funk bassline which interchanges with piano chords and the house beat.[2][16][17][18] That doesn't seem to be something that screams for four citations. Sample only, pls check throughout.
- Citation overkill is everywhere: The song was serviced to contemporary hit radio formats the following day in Australia, Italy, and the United Kingdom, as well as the United States on 5 November.[46][47][48][49] Put those citations with the piece they are citing?
- "Don't Start Now" premiered on 31 October 2019 at 13:00 HST (23:00 UTC) as the lead single from Future Nostalgia.[43][44] Why do we need to burden the readers with the exact times here ? (Encyclopedia, NOTNEWS ?)
- Respectively just makes a sentence harder to read. And why does the encyclopedic reader need so many details on dates? On 15 November 2019, a vertical video and lyric video for the track were released on Spotify and YouTube respectively. -- > In November 2019, a vertical video was released on Spotify and a lyric video was released on YouTube.
- Mike Christie's essay (above) on how to improve Reception sections could be useful.
- Check your text throughout for statements that can be become dated and should have an "as of date" attached, sample only: It also holds the record for the most weeks in the top 10 without reaching number one.
- Try to make better transitions so prose is not ... this, then that, then the other. Sample: She then runs down a staircase to return to the nightclub.[112] Lipa is later shown washing her face in the nightclub's bathroom and strutting in its hallway. --> She runs down a staircase to return to the nightclub, and is later shown washing her face in the bathroom there and strutting its hallway.
I hope that gives you enough to work on; prose nitpicking is not my strength, so I haven't done that, and I recommend that you have a music editor run through the prose, and also make sure all sources are reliable (I checked only the first ten or so and didn't see problems). Good luck ! SandyGeorgia (Talk) 19:08, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
- SandyGeorgia thanks for an amazing peer review. I will be sure to look at your comments. For now, I am going to close this. LOVI33 17:06, 28 October 2020 (UTC)