Deus Ex (video game) edit
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I'm trying to get this to WP:FA status. It's a genre-defining game, and considered a level 5 vital article. Not entirely sure where to begin, but I'll take any and all feedback. Gaps, errors, research, prose. Willing to work at this. Shooterwalker (talk) 16:02, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
Thoughts/comments from ProtoDrake edit
Hi Shooterwalker, I'm not sure how much I could actually help, but I can give you some pointers. --ProtoDrake (talk) 14:10, 16 February 2022 (UTC)
- Gameplay needs condensing and more citations added, since at the moment it looks broken and has a rambling style. Also the image needs its licensing seen to as that wouldn't pass muster in an FAR.
- Synopsis, could really do with some trimming as at the moment it prompts the eye to glaze over. You could use the other Deus Ex articles as a template for this section.
- Development, needs trimming down to something that's concise yet informative, as the game's development now has its own article. Perhaps use Final Fantasy XV and The Last of Us as examples for that.
- Release, this section needs tidying and further citations, particularly the original release. Also condensing the mod section down a little and finding more third-party sources.
- Reception, needs fewer quotes and more paraphrasing. Also, maybe cut down the number of listicals as it's a slog to read through.
- Legacy, generally needs more citations and a little tidying. You can use the other mainline Deus Ex articles for sources.
- General, the article needs a copyedit, but that can wait until after major edits.
@Shooterwalker: Have you made progress on the comments above? If so, please comment here on what you have done and ping ProtoDrake so they can take another look. If you are not able to work on the article right now, can you close this PR and open a new one when you have more time? Thanks. Z1720 (talk) 23:13, 9 April 2022 (UTC)