Wikipedia:Peer review/Denver Broncos seasons/archive1

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Hopful I can get this to FL status at some piont.


Thanks, Buc (talk) 19:58, 17 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
  • Avoid bold links in the lead per WP:MOS.
  • Put (NFL) after National Football League.
  • Remove full stop in caption - it's a sentence fragment so it doesn't need a full stop per WP:MOS.
  • Four paras in lead is too much for such a short article - see WP:LEAD.
  • Explain what AFC is before you use it.
  • Link Super Bowl.
  • Explain what a "losing season" is.
  • "...and were AFC West champions twice and AFC champions once." and.. and... reads clumsily.
  • "two years in a row" prefer "for two consecutive years"
  • "have also experienced one notable periods of decline" ?!
  • "when they never made the playoffs " just "did not make the playoffs" is better.
  • "They also had their two worst seasons " ..." They also experienced their..." would be better.
  • "But they never made the playoffs prior to the AFL-NFL merger in 1970." don't start a sentence with "But..." and avoid this "never made..." stuff.
  • Explicit references required for the "Coach of the Year" etc awards.
  • Explain the significance of "The Drive" and "The Fumble" for non-experts.
  • "sportsecyclopedia.com. " or "Sports Encyclopedia"? Same site is given different parameters.

The Rambling Man (talk) 08:54, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]