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Daydream (Mariah Carey album)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I think that I did a good job passing the last week working on this. I don't know why, but I believe that it is not good yet for a featured article review, I am more sure about a good article review. Feel free to give me any constructive comment about my work. Regards, Sparks Fly 17:23, 11 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments I will try to be as objective as I can since this is one of my favorite albums EVER.

Lead

• The lead section is too short and does not provide enough information about the album, on Featured Articles for album the lead mentions release date, artist, producer, singles released, tour, "legacy" and it expands for two or three paragraphs. Also there is a comma after the reference, should be the other way around.

Recording date

• I do not see the relation in the refs 1 and 2 and the recording date. One is for a christmas rehearsal (and truth be told is from the Daydream era), and the other is a link to the article for "Always Be My Baby" (the album third single in US).

Reception - Commercial

• I do not know if this claim is valid anymore: "That week also still remains the record as the highest non-debut-week sales for an album by a female artist" and is unreferenced.
• "The sales of Daydream during 1996 made it the second best-selling album in America in that year, behind only Alanis Morissette's Jagged Little Pill." In one of the last sections (End of Year charts) you have refs for this, you should include one here.
• There is no info about the recording sessions and the background of the artist to this point (1990-1995) you should put a section for that info.

Reception - Critical

• The first part of the critical reception section is unreferenced and also, too short. I know that there is not a lot of reviews for this album, I remember that since I researched for the EW review, but maybe a little reword could work.

References There is a proper format for references, and currently the refs 1, 2, 3, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 11, 20, 29, 30, 31, 42, 43, 44, 45, 46, 47, 48 and 49, do not have it.

For the GA status you will also need to be more specific about the singles released: "Fantasy" was the first worldwide, "One Sweet Day" was the second, but "Open Arms" was the third in Europe while "Always Be My Baby" was the third in US. Also you should mention that "Forever" was an airplay-only release and "Underneath the Stars" was a planned released, but it was withdrawn (nevertheless it appears on her Greatest Hits album).

I will stop here, if you need any help, just ask. Jaespinoza (talk) 01:47, 15 April 2009 (UTC)

Second review. Since you asked to review it again, I will do it... Comments

• Contratulations, this article now looks very good, but I have some comments about it:
  • Thank you! It was a long week that I will never forget.
• Maybe a little rewording with this part "and less pure pop sound" in the lead.
  • I will think something better, but now nothing comes in my mind. =/
• And also in this part "One of early choices to appear on the album was the pop ballad "Fantasy."... this song it is not a ballad.
  • done . LOL. Sorry, I think that I thought to put other song which is a ballad and instead I put "Fantasy."
• For this section: "some critics felt the lyrics were a controlled exercise, with little emotion or heart"... who did it? which critics?.
  • Well, I retired this sentence from the NME article, which did not stated anything else beside they claiming something generalized, so I don't have the answer that you want.
• I do not remember very well, but the "Daydream Interlude" in the album booklet is only credited to Carey and the remixer, since they do not use the Tom Tom Club sample, I will check it out.
  • I think that you made a mistake. According with the sources, this sample is used in the "Fantasy" track (#1), not in the Daydream Interlude (#11).
    • Yes, I looked at the album booklet and the tracklisting in the article is fine as it is.
• Where are the succession boxes? This album peaked at number-one in US, UK and some other markets, a reliable source for that is www.lescharts.com. Jaespinoza (talk) 01:25, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
  • done . I forget the reason that I had to delete this. And BTW its a good source? Good, I didn't know that.
• In Latin America the track 13 was "El Amor Que Soñé" (Open Arms) with a spanish adaptation by Manny Benito and it is not included. In UK the bonus track was "Fantasy" feat. ODB, maybe you should mention that too.
  • I googled and I did not find anything good-to-wikipedia reporting this. So I do not have the writers, the lengths and etc. But if you think if its fine to put it without these informations I will do without problems.
    • It is interesting, I have the Latin American edition of the album and includes "El Amor Que Soné" as track number 13. The spanish adaptation was made by Manny Benito, in México this version was released as a single with a video from her Madison Square live performance. Jaespinoza (talk) 01:25, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
      • done. Thank you for the informations.

I will stop here... if you need more help, just ask. Jaespinoza (talk) 20:28, 18 April 2009 (UTC)