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Dartmouth College edit

It's been a year and a half since this article has had a peer review, yet because it is one of the "Ivies" and attracts numerous page vies, it should be a top priority for Education-related articles. Over the past month or so, it has been updated considerably since recieving it's GA rating. I have nearly doubled the number of citations (esp. in the Intro, History, and Technology sections). I believe it is comprehensive, neutral, and especially stable. Broader topics are assigned links to their own articles (with their own sources documented in said articles). Please comment on areas that can be improved in order to advance this article's status. Thanks! - DMCer 19:34, 12 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 21:51, 12 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Awadewit edit

I agree with you that this page should be a good one and there is much on this page that is excellent. I found the writing to be superb and the images to be well-chosen and well-placed. That said, I do have a few suggestions.

If you eventually want this article to achieve FA status, it will probably have to have more sources (and probably fewer web-based sources, if possible). There are lots of unsourced facts. I'll just give two examples:

As many as three-quarters of Dartmouth undergraduates participate in some form of athletics, and one-quarter of Dartmouth students play a varsity sport at some point during their undergraduate years. The percentage of varsity athletes and varsity sports are thus disproportionately greater than at many much larger colleges in the country.

The John Sloan Dickey Center for International Understanding was established in 1982 to honor Dartmouth's twelfth president (1945-70), John Sloan Dickey.

I would move both the lists of alumni and presidents to the end of the article as lists tend to interrupt the flow of an article.

As the article is already rather long, is it possible to delete some unnecessary information, such as all of the minutiae about the mascot debate? I noticed that the article says more about Dartmouth's athletics than its academics. That is rather odd, in my opinion. Dartmouth is known more for its academics than its athletics.

This article includes lots of good information about the founding of Dartmouth and Dartmouth now, but I was kind of wondering about Dartmouth in between. What happened to 1820-1970, say?

Thanks for being specific. Very good notes, I'll get on these.DMCer 08:48, 23 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

AnonEMouse edit

Excellent article, a bit long, but better too long than too short. General criticism, there are many sections without a single citation.

"total enrollment of 5,744" - should say as of when.
"Adjacent is the Spaulding Pool." choppy, merge with next sentence
NCAA is an external link, instead link to Wikipedia article.
"Chase Peace Prize" - if so prestigious, shouldn't we have an article on it? At least a red link.
"Hinman boxes" - explain or at lieast cite why they're so called
"Dartmouth's Honor Principle" - explain that it's an actual document, anxd the quote comes from it
wikilink valedictorian, salutotarian - not common terms outside academia
Presidents list - explain somewhere that the number after the comma is the year they graduated the school
How did Ernest Nichols get the presidency, not being either a Dart grad, nor a Rev, seemingly breaking both traditions?
"historical and nostalgic reasons" - cite, it's cited in header, but not in body.
"some have questioned" - WP:WEASEL - name at least one of the some
Traditions - needs at least one citation for the section
Greek life - similarly needs at least one citation, especially if there was a "campus-wide debate"

--AnonEMouse ^(squeak) 15:25, 6 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]