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I've listed this article for peer review because I am working on getting John Mayer up to featured topic status and I'm starting with getting the strongest articles to Good Article status. I'm knee-deep in John Mayer and need outside input.

Thanks, Esprit15d • talk • contribs 17:45, 19 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: interesting article and a good start, but needs a fair amount of work to get to GA status. Here are some suggestions for improvement (and thanks, now John Mayer songs are stuck in my brain ;-) ).

Biggest problem as I see it is a lack of references. The whole cover art section has no refs, for example (and parts of it read like original research, so refs are needed). My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref. For example the Charts and certifications has four chart positions without refs.
Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
Next biggest problem is language, which needs to be polished in several places. As one example The album features mainly new songs, though "Gravity" and "Vultures" are available in live versions from John Mayer Trio's Try!, and "Bold as Love", which is a Jimi Hendrix cover: the first Hendrix cover that Mayer has ever recorded as a studio release (although Mayer has recorded other Hendrix songs over time in live settings such as "The Wind Cries Mary" and "Wait Until Tomorrow"). is a run-on sentence and should be split into two or perhaps three smaller sentences.
There are also places that need to provide context to the reader - for example in the quoted run-on sentence, it would help to better identify / date the live album Try! (2005, so before the release of this).
The quote that opens the Background and production section is not a pull quote, but does use the pull quote {{cquote}} template. The MOS in WP:MOSQUOTE says that {{blockquote}} should be used in such cases, but only when the quote is four or more lines long - on my monitor the quote is less than one line long.
The MOS also now discourages the wikilinking of dates.
Several places need to be expanded - for example the Background and production section really says nothing about the production (just the name and album covers and art). Where was it recorded? When? The infobox tells us in brief, the article should expand on these points.
Article is underlinked in places - for example the co-producer Steve Jordan (musician) is not linked in the lead.
Read the article out loud carefully (print it out). That should help with the rough spots and to catch things like In November 2007, a special edition of Continuum is set to be released. (this is still in here in Jan. 2009?)
A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow - there are many album FAS that would be good models. One example is Kid A

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 20:46, 26 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]