Color of the day (police) edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I spend a lot of my time here doing wikignoming or doing dispute resolution via WP:3O or WP:MEDCAB and only occasionally create new articles or do major mainspace edits. So I'd like an opinion on this article I've created from scratch. I don't ever expect it to be WP:GA or WP:FA but think it could be improved beyond what I've done to B class perhaps. I'm trying to do more mainspace edits because although it is my declared intention to be mostly involved in dispute resolution, I think that a mediator should first and foremost be a good and experienced mainspace editor. Please be as critical as you'd like: I have an extremely thick skin :-)
Thanks, fr33kman -s- 04:34, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way - I think this should be at least two paragraphs per WP:LEAD
- Article is in serious need of more references - there are citation needed tags and the whole "Purpose" section and the last 4 or 5 sentnces in History have no refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- I think See also is for links not otherwise in the article, but NYPD is already in
- I think more concrete, specific examples owuld help and could be used to expand the article.
- Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase
- ANy chance for some images (even one)?
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:55, 17 October 2008 (UTC)