Chetco River edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because it just passed its GAN, and I would like to see it become a featured article. Xtzou, the GA reviewer, gave me a few good tips already. Any comments or suggestions are appreciated.
Thanks, LittleMountain5 17:45, 5 June 2010 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: This looks very nice to me, here are some suggestions for improvement, mostly nitpicks, though I think this needs more on Geology to pass FAC.
- In the lead, since Oregon is linked, shouldn't California be too?
- Yes, done.
- I noticed that the Chetco people link is to the Tolowa, but the Tolowa article does not mention the word Chetco, and this article does not mention Tolowa (that I could see). I do not thinks the Tolowa need to be mentioned in the lead, but they probably should be in the History section. I would also mention the name Chetco in the Tolowa article.
- Changed link to Chetco, maybe I'll expand it some day.
- Per WP:DECADE I think that ...after gold and other precious metals were discovered in the 1840s and 50s. should be ...after gold and other precious metals were discovered in the 1840s and 1850s.
- Fixed.
- Towns are usually founded or sometimes laid out, not created The town of Brookings was created in the early 1900s, and incorporated in 1951.
- Fixed.
- Be consistent on capitalizing redwood / Redwood. The lead makes it sound like it is the northernmost grove in the world, the Course section says in the US. I assume there are none in Canada or elsewhere?? Ecology later says world's northernmost...
- Capitalized all 'Redwood's, changed United States to world.
- Unclear which place the bomb was dropped on It flows between Bosley Butte to the north and Mount Emily to the south, the [latter is the] site of one of only four bombs dropped in the continental United States by an enemy aircraft.
- Fixed.
- Are river miles available for any of the tributaries? If so I would add them, but realize the data may not be avaialble
- I've only found river mile information from the mouth to the stream gage site, 10.7 miles upstream. Added one.
- Was the maximum flow a known storm? In Pennsylvania the max flows are often the dates of hurricanes (or their remnants) hitting the state
- There's not a specific page (except for maybe Pineapple Express), but it was the floods of 1964. (No specific name, either...)
- I might include that 97% of the land is forested in the lead
- Added.
- I think this needs a Geology section to pass FAC - comprehensiveness is a FA criterion - see the Rogue River (Oregon) for an example Geology section
- Will work on it.
- Added.
- Will work on it.
- I know it is linked, but I would add a phrase describing Kalmiopsis, "a flowering evergreen shrub and the namesake..."
- Added.
- I love redwoods and think they are really amazing, but I also think the "northernmost grove" part may be overdone in both course and ecology - could Course just say it flows past the redwoods (Lead has already told the reader these are the northenmost ones) and then Ecology could go into the details?
- Sounds good, fixed.
- The redwoods are also about 8 miles north of the Cailfornia according to Ecology, but the lead says the mouth is 6 miles north of California. Since these are coastal redwoods, I assume they are near the mouth? If they are inland, I would say that (and specify how far inland, if known) to avoid confusion
- They are a bit inland, added approximate river mile.
- Over 200 species of animals inhabit the river alone.[8] would this be clearer as "inhabit the river and its watershed" - as is it sounds like there are Bear, deer, and foxes living permanently in the river.
- Yep, fixed.
- Since most of the river is in a national forest, I would add the date of its establishment to the history, as well as any other details on it (expansion, etymologyt, hsitory, etc.)
- Added.
- Since the river is all in one county, I would also mention the year of its establishment in the History section
- Added.
- I think I would include the populations of the two towns at the mouth in the History section (2000 census? More recent US Census estimates?).
- Added.
- Can an image or two be added to History?
- Added one.
- The "Other" refs all look like Websites - what makes them different from the ones listed under "Websites"?
- They're mostly either maps or PDFs, but I could merge them into the books and websites sections, if you want.
- This looks quite good and seems like it would need little work to get ready for FAC. Nice job and I sure hope they block the mining plans.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:11, 13 June 2010 (UTC)