Charles T. Webber edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe it is ready to be published. There are some areas which I think could be improved, as outlined below.
I am concerned about the fact that I could not find much information to include in the 'Early Life' sub-section. As well as this, I think that the whole 'Biography' could be improved -- I think perhaps it is too broad and that I did not transition between the different sub-sections very well. Compared to other sections ('Contributions to the Artistic Scene in Cincinnati', for example), I think I did not include enough relevant information. However, I did have trouble finding anything else to include, so I was hoping for some guidance regarding this issue.
Aside from this, I also had a bit of trouble figuring out a way to present the information from a neutral point of view, due to the fact that I have written about a public figure, and included biographical information. For this in particular, I hope to receive feedback which outlines whether or not my article is neutral enough, and how I can fix it if it is not.
Overall, I hope to receive feedback about the quality of my article in terms of writing, and with the references I have used. I would also like to know if there is anything I could change to make the article flow more nicely (perhaps merging some of the sections I have included, or adding more sections to add clarity).