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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to receive guidance on how to best organize and improve this article for future GAN and DYK submissions. Thanks, West Virginian (talk) 13:52, 21 February 2022 (UTC) A few thoughts....[reply]

In today's world, I believe images are important.

Find a picture of her, and put it in the infobox. Perhaps from a newspaper article or Library of Congress? Her gravestone? The mural?
Is there a newspaper headline that you could make into an image, maybe from the Library of Congress? This would be for the court case section.
Are there any additional photos of Coketon, or can you take a current photo?
Can you take a closeup picture of at least one of the historical markers, and put it in the last section while replacing your text?

TwoScars, first and foremost, I appreciate you taking the time to perform this thorough and comprehensive peer review of this article. I cannot thank you enough for your comments, guidance, and suggestions. I have added two images I took in 2018–a current photograph from the Coketon area and a photograph of the historical marker detailing the Coketon Colored School's history. I have located a photograph of Mrs. Williams on several websites, including the J. R. Clifford Project website. I am working to determine whether this photograph was taken prior to January 1, 1927 and whether it can be shared in the public domain, but I may upload the image to English Wikipedia under a fair use justification until then. Please let me know if you have any guidance or recommendations on this. – West Virginian (talk) 17:17, 6 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I like the sign. I wish the other photo had some of the town in it. Assuming you are contacting J.R. Clifford Project about the photo. TwoScars (talk) 17:58, 6 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

TwoScars, thank you so much again for your feedback and suggestions. I will work on contacting the J. R. Clifford Project in the meantime. Regarding Coketon, not much remains of the town beyond remaining coke ovens and some associated buildings just outside the Thomas corporate limits. I'll work on finding additional images in the meantime. Thanks again for this suggestion! -- West Virginian (talk) 21:46, 7 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I prefer an Intro section of three paragraphs, although that is not anybody's requirement. Perhaps the second (long) paragraph could be split, with the last paragraph summarizing her big accomplishment of the court case.

TwoScars, thank you for this suggestion. I have split the second paragraph of the lead section into two. Please let me know if this requires any further modification in the meantime. -- West Virginian (talk) 17:17, 6 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

You have short (one-paragraph) main sections, and one subsection that is huge. Perhaps the first two paragraphs could be combined into one section. The Williams v. Board.... could then be its own main section, with one or two subsections. The last two main sections (Later life, Legacy) could be combined.

TwoScars, I have re-organized these sections accordingly. Please let me know if this requires any further modification. -- West Virginian (talk) 17:17, 6 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps the Williams v. Board of Education of Fairfax District section could use a sub-section or two. TwoScars (talk) 17:58, 6 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

TwoScars, thank you for this suggestion. I've added two subsections and assessing whether I can better organize this section's subsections. -- West Virginian (talk) 21:46, 7 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

For the salary totaled $120 ($3,456.44), I like to say "in current dollars" or something like (from another article) "In 1889, another flood produced an estimated $1 million (equivalent to $28,803,704 in 2020) in damages...." The Wikicode = ({{Inflation|US|1000000|1889|fmt=eq}})

TwoScars, I've modified this inflation template accordingly, and will continue to assess better ways of formatting this template. Please let me know if you have any further guidance regarding this, and thank you again. -- West Virginian (talk) 21:46, 7 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

There needs to be something, maybe a footnote, that explains she is not Carrie Williams Clifford (the writer and activist), nor Carrie Williams (Executive Producer at Paramount) nor Carrie Williams (the Disney character from a 2013 film).

I like the "This article is about the West Virginia educator. For the author and activist, see Carrie Williams Clifford." TwoScars (talk) 17:58, 6 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, TwoScars! -- West Virginian (talk) 21:46, 7 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@West Virginian: That's all I have. Nice article that needs to be in Wikipedia. TwoScars (talk) 18:22, 4 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

TwoScars, thank you so much again for taking the time to review this article and to provide this extremely helpful and appreciated feedback. This article is much improved because of your guidance throughout this process. Thanks again! -- West Virginian (talk) 21:46, 7 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]