Wikipedia:Peer review/Call of Duty 2/archive2

Call of Duty 2

Previous peer review

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because… it recently became a good article and am wondering if there's a chance it could become a featured article soon after a few more edits.

Thanks, SCB '92 (talk) 12:44, 1 April 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• "published by Activision, but was published by Konami in the Japanese market." reads slightly odd to me, perhaps "published by Konami in Japan and Activision in the rest of the world"?
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "Australia" or was it Australasia?
• "Other versions were made for..." would prefer "were released on other platforms, including..."
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Don't think we need to link grenade, but wouldn't fall on my sword to unlink it.
• "to go off" -> "to explode" or "to detonate".
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "There was some controversy in advertisement" -> "There was some controversy over the game's advertisement"
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "The Pointe du Hoc D-Day mission in the singleplayer campaign. American LCVP landing crafts with US Rangers." why not "The Pointe du Hoc D-Day mission in the single player campaign depicting American LCVP landing crafts with US Rangers"?
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "the role of several Allied protagonists" roles?
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "character's heartbeat will become loud" will increase in volume? noticeably?
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Is there a decent gaming article for "checkpoint"?
• "like explosions from grenades or shells" -> "such as explosions..."
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "The maps include Normandy..." you should explain what the multiplayer mode offers before talking about what maps are on offs.r
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "for PC" earlier on this was for "Microsoft Windows". Be consistent.
  •  Done added "PCs" after "Microsoft Windows" in the lead-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "There's also the" avoid contractions.
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "made a Battle Chatter System," you've said this once already.
  • removed-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "a more non-linear battlefield" then two paras later "was going to be less linear"... repetitive. Revisit the Development section and check it flows well and isn't repetitive.
  • removed-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "to see what's happening" avoid contractions.
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• " in E3 2005" since you only link E3, suggest you say " in E3 in 2005"
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "now little icons" small icons.
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "dead when they're not" avoid contractions.
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Put FPS in parentheses after "first person shooter" in the lead because you have FPS in a quote but some people may not understand that.
  •  Done-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• "By January 2008, the game had sold 2 million copies.[46]" any update on total sales since it's now April 2012?
• Make sure ref titles comply with WP:DASH which means replace spaced hyphens with en-dashes.
• Is it really a Category:Electronic sports games?
  • removed-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 16:40, 11 April 2012 (UTC)

Cheers for the peer review-SCB '92 (talk) 20:18, 13 April 2012 (UTC)