Wikipedia:Peer review/Burnside Fountain/archive1

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I've listed this article for peer review because it is an article about a rather quirky statue in Worcester Massachusetts that is a sort of mascot for the city. I feel i have covered the topic and am looking at perhaps nominating for Good Article.

Thanks, Found5dollar (talk) 02:01, 25 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Lead image in the infobox is cool but somewhat overwhelms the lead because it's so large...
  • "non-working drinking " I think "non-functioning" be better.
  • Not entirely convinced you need to link bronze, it's a pretty common term.
  • "Due to Harvey committing suicide before.."-> "Harvey committed suicide before... leaving Sherry Fry to..."
  • I'm not sure why you have "USD $5,000", you could just link the $ or alternatively remove the D because right now it's US dollar dollar...
  • Worcestor Common is over linked in the lead.
  • "Since then there has been one successful theft in 1970" odd way of putting it, why not "The statue was stolen in 1970..."
  • fixed
  • "the Manneken Pis is one for Brussels." don't need the "one".
  • removed
  • Dimensions only include two dimensions, the basin looks like it's three-dimensional to me...
  • Don't have the "unfortunate" quote in both the text and a quote box.
  • Again, think about the USD $ thing and in any case, don't over link it.
  • "showing it's bright green" its.
  • "Sadly" - POV.
  • I think you mention it's commonly referred to as Turtle Boy about five times in the article, once or twice (i.e. once in the lead, once in the article) would be sufficient.
  • "a substantial amount for a Reddit posting. " ref?
  • References section should come before External links.

fixed--Found5dollar (talk) 20:38, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Works, such as The New York Times should be in italics in the refs.

The Rambling Man (talk) 12:11, 1 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]