Wikipedia:Peer review/Bionicle: Mask of Light/archive1

Bionicle: Mask of Light edit

  • This article attained GA status last month, and I am eager to improve it to A status, perhaps get it near or even to FA status. What separates this article from Wikipedias best? Thanks! Judgesurreal777 04:29, 20 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think it has the makings of a good article, as it has a good use of inline citations and a decent structure, but I found it unbalanced and not comprehensive. It also needs copyediting for style ("he's too much of a wimp" for example, doesn't have a very encylopedic tone).
    • The plot section is far too long - it should be a summary, not a blow-by-blow account of every scene.
    • It needs a section on the characters. This is currently interwoven with the plot section and makes it difficult to read as well as increasing its length still further
    • The production section covers immediate pre-production only. It needs information on earlier pre-production, production and post-production.
    • I assume the film is CG animation, but the only clue is in the accompanying images.
    • Some of the information is disconnected, assuming a familiarity with the subject:For the design, Shakespeare noted that "The first film had primary colors that were coded to the areas and a younger feel.". Coded to the areas? What does that mean?
Hope this helps. Yomanganitalk 00:55, 16 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]