Wikipedia:Peer review/Bikini Bottom/archive1
Bikini Bottom edit
This article needs to be fully reviewed so that it can be improved, and be worked toward featured article status. Please post ANY type of feedback you may have in order to improve this article. Please be specific, if you can. -AMK152 18:38, 24 July 2006 (UTC)
- The article needs a fair bit of improvement if it is to become a featured article. The lead could be expanded and an opening picture of the fictional city would help. The article has too many lists and should try to focus on eliminating the lists and writing good prose. With any fictional entity, the focus should not be on just describing fictional details but instead describing the relevance and relation of these details to the real world. Fictional entities are often a reflection of the cultural setting from which they emerged, you already noted this with statements like "which are similar to that of United States laws" now try to expand on that point. Comprehensively describing all the details of a fictional entity is not necessary and may not even be beneficial in a well-written article. Cedars 01:31, 25 July 2006 (UTC)