Wikipedia:Peer review/Bernard Hopkins vs. Joe Calzaghe/archive1

Bernard Hopkins vs. Joe Calzaghe edit

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch • Watch peer review

A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for May 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I created it in April and I've been working out it since and I've received a peer review yet on this article.

Thanks, Rvk41 (talk) 21:48, 4 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, here are some suggestions for improvement:

A model article is useful for ideas on style, refs, structure, etc. Unfortunately I do not see a boxing match GA or FA, but try asking at WikiProject Boxing for ideas.
The lead needs to be expanded per WP:LEAD and should summarize the whole article.
Watch out for POV and peacock language, for example For quite some time, this matchup seemed destined to be one of the great what-might-have-beens in recent boxing history. While Hopkins made 20 consecutive title defenses as a middleweight before two losses to Jermain Taylor, Calzaghe dominated the super middleweight division from Europe during a decade-long reign that still hasn't ended. See WP:NPOV and WP:PEACOCK
These two sentences are just one example of many that also need citations / references. Generally each paragraph, any statistics, all direct quotes, and any extraordinary claims need a ref. See WP:CITE and WP:V
Please give both metric and English units - the {{convert}} template is useful here - example Both fighters weighed in at 173 lb.[6]
Minimize or explain jargon - for example Hopkins appeared to be fighting his fight as he was gliding off his backfoot around the ring and he landed his first flush punch - wikilinks can help here too
What did people other than the two boxers say about the fight? What did sportswriters write about it? Did they feel it was a fair fight and agree with the split decision by the judges? Put the fight into context for the reader, WP:PCR
Refs look good.

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 02:15, 9 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]