Wikipedia:Peer review/Benjamin Franklin/archive1

Benjamin Franklin edit

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because there are some unsourced statements that need to be addressed by people familiar with the topic, the article doesn't yet satisfy all the GA Criteria so I'm listing it for Peer Review first so that any suggestions for the improvement of the article can be taken onboard and any issues addressed.

Thanks, —Ғяіᴆaз'§ĐøøмChampagne?9:37pm 11:37, 24 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Nikkimaria

Hello again! Some comments on this article:

  • Please do take a look at those automated tools in the box on the side of the review, they are quite helpful for large-scale articles like these
  • Try to combine some of those shorter paragraphs together to improve flow, and also merge some of the shorter subsections
  • Some tangential material could be cut to tighten the prose. For example, some of the info on Puritans is superfluous (although some should be kept)
  • I could go through and list every point that needs a citation. However, I'm instead going to provide some general rules:
  • In general, one citation per paragraph should be considered a minimum (except in the lead)
  • All quotations, statistics, opinions, and material that is likely to be challenged should be sourced
  • Avoid stacking images and sandwiching text between images

This is obviously not an extensive list, but it should give you enough to get started on. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 01:11, 25 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oh ok, thanks for the comments Nikki, I'll take them onboard and try and fix what I can :) Regards, —Ғяіᴆaз'§ĐøøмChampagne?6:03pm 08:03, 25 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]