Wikipedia:Peer review/Battle of Queenston Heights/archive1

Battle of Queenston Heights edit

Having scrawled a large part of this article in its current form while I was bored at high school an awful long time ago, I find myself wondering 'gee, I wonder if this could be a featured article someday'. And the answer, as I read the thing, is probably 'no' but I can't figure out what's wrong with it. So I figured I'd ask the community. Lord Bob 17:04, 27 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

It's a very good start. Some suggestions:

Sections headings are needed, with a brief summary of the battle at the beginning, as well as a statement of its importance.
A "background" section or paragraph is needed, letting readers know the overall strategic situation before the battle.
A map would be nice, though of course good public domain ones are hard to come by unless you make one yourself, which is time consuming, though not difficult.
Both references are by Canadian authors. Some American scholarly input would be good.
A book came out recently, supposedly the first full-length one about this battle (A Very Brilliant Affair: The Battle of Queenstown Heights, 1812). It really ought to be a part of this article.
Missing are various details, such as General Alexander Smyth (not mentioned) refusing to cooperate in the operation as requested by Stephen Van Rensselaer III, and Rensselaer's resignation after the battle.

Keep at it! --Kevin Myers | on Wheels! 17:57, 27 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Lord Bob. :) What Kevin said. I'd also suggest mentioning (perhaps with a photo or two?) the Queenston Heights park & the current Brock monument, and the history of the prior monument. The latter was at one time the tallest structure in the Empire, and one of the very few targets of a bombing in Ontario. But I'm not NPOV on this, having sat on General Brock's stone cold shoulder while a student at Brock U. :) Good luck with the FA campaign! Cheers, Madmagic 20:00, 27 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Better than very good start. I would like to echo Kevin Myers' comments. I think it is pretty important to have a beginning paragraph which briefly describes the battle, its outcome and significance. A map would be nice, especially indicating the many places in the Niagara peninsula that may not be familiar to most reader. Good job, well on its way to being a featured article. Luigizanasi 18:07, 30 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you all for your terrific input. I haven't been able to track down a public domain map yet, and I might end up drawing my own if it comes to it. Plus, I still haven't grabbed any American sources (it's the weekend and I'm not keen on zipping in to the University library to dig some up, so I used what I have). However, I did just expand on the background and the aftermath of the battle, as well as add a few section headings in there. So it's a start. Lord Bob 20:38, 30 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Here is a public domain image, if you want to use it. Also, if you'd like to draw a map, the following three (probably copyrighted) maps should help you: 1, 2, and 3. – Quadell ^{(talk) (bounties)} 21:43, 31 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]