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Australia–Zimbabwe relations

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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it's well on the way to GA, and I want to see what needs fixing/expanding to make sure it meets or exceeds the criteria. In addition, I have personal opinions on this topic, and while I've tried to keep it as neutral as possible, a POV check probably wouldn't go astray in case something has slipped in accidentally.

Thanks, Lankiveil ^{(speak to me)} 13:18, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

Giggy

• I profess to knowing nothing about the topic, so if you say it's broad, I'll take your word for it.
• It's a bit odd on the top right corner map that Australia is written on the left, yet appears to the right of Zimbabwe on the map. Dunno what to do about it... maybe colour code the text (for the names of the countries) so it's clear which is which?
• Some refs lack publisher info. Also, newspapers/print publications need italics throughout (example fix)
• "Australia currently manintains an embassy in Harare,[2] and Zimbabwe maintains an embassy in Canberra.[3]" - I think you should note that they're the capitals of the respective countries.
• First paragraph of Early history wouldn't be harmed by some refs.
• "Despite this majority, the colony of Rhodesia broke away from the United Kingdom in 1965, with the minority white government of Ian Smith issuing a Unilateral Declaration of Independence, while Australia became established as a stable parliamentary democracy." - tacking on info about Australia at the end makes this sentence a bit confusing. Maybe split them up.
• USA Today is wlinked as a ref publisher; in this case be consistent and wlink everything (that has an article).
• "and later offered aid to Zimbabwe only if the 2008 elections in that country were "fair"" - needs wording... maybe "and said he would only offer Zimbabwe aid if the 2008 elections were contested fairly"?
• Maybe a POV issue or maybe there's nothing else to say, but... it feels like often, it's the Australians that take the lead in this relationship, so to speak... eg. Howard's travel restrictions/Rudd's no-aid-unless-it's fair. What, if anything, has Zimbabwe(/its leaders) done with regards to Australia? (Does that make sense?)
• "At the 2006 Australian census, 20,158 people listed themselves as having been born in Zimbabwe. Of these, ten thousand (or roughly 50%) had arrived since 2001.[16]" - another example of the above point... do we have a Zimbabwe census?
• I hope these comments help. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Cheers, Giggy (talk) 13:19, 17 September 2008 (UTC)