Wikipedia:Peer review/Attic calendar/archive1

Attic calendar edit

This entry has been rewritten. I'm in a state of photocopywrite intimidation and wasn't really intending to put it up for FA but would appreciate any responses or suggestions about the entry. Flounderer 01:47, 16 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

The grammar, puntuation and layout are bad. I've done a fairly heavy copyedit of most of the article (I didn't get all the way through). There are a lot of sentences with multiple dependent clauses. These make the article very difficult to read. Go through the article and break up any sentence with two or three clauses into smaller sentences. Have a good read through the Wikipedia:Manual of Style. It gives good examples of how to put an article together. Have a read through some of the better Wikipedia articles on calendars, and try to emmulate their style of writing. --Gareth Hughes 17:42, 17 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking the time to copyedit the entry and in particular for improving the look of the tables (I was fumbling my way there and the help pages on tables in wikipedia could be a little easier for a newcomer to use!). And you are right that many sentences are convoluted, even if I don't share your dislike of sentences beginning with "And...." Flounderer 01:58, 18 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]