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I've listed this article for peer review because I recently overhauled it and my goal is to get it to GA status. I haven't written an article in years, so I'm a bit rusty.
Thanks, Burningclean [speak] 07:55, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
I think the first paragraph needs to be tightened up some, but otherwise it's good. When I first read the line "which prompted them to write and record the album to the best of their abilities" I read it as an inference the writer made based on it being their first album on Roadrunner. The line did not make sense until I read the writing and recording section. Maybe something like: "Produced by drummer and guitarist Adam Dutkiewicz, this was the band's first album on a major label, and they devoted significantly more time to the writing and recording process." Then put the current reference [6] afterwards to increase credibility. Or just put the reference on the current line.
The line "a positive message through the music" in the first paragraph also. Perhaps a reference also from the writing and recording part to support this, for people that do not want to read the whole article.
In the Artwork and packaging section, the line "As Killswitch Engage was signing to Roadrunner Records, the band had made sure that written into the contract was for D'Antonio to produce all of Killswitch Engage's artwork." To me, it sounds better without the "had" but that's really being nitpicky. Jesterhead57 (talk) 22:42, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
The above comments were left on my talk page. I'm just pasting them here so I can show that issues were addressed. Burningclean [speak] 22:36, 16 May 2012 (UTC)