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I've listed this article for peer review to get feedback on how to further improve it (at least to B-Class). I would especially appreciate any feedback from members of the United States military history , World War I and World War II task forces

Thanks, Dodgerblue777 (talk) 22:58, 14 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Bob Marley's Buffalo Soldier is going through my head as I write this. I think many of the same issues I found in the peer review for 93rd Infantry Division will apply here too, so sorry if these reviews seem similar. This is also an interesting article about an important unit, but it too needs a lot of work if it is to become a GA or even FA. Here are some suggestions for improvement.

A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are many FAs at Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Warfare several of which might be good models, such as 13th Airborne Division (United States)
The lead does not follow WP:LEAD and should be expanded to more than one paragraph. The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article - my rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way.
Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself, but the "Buffalo Soldiers Division" nickname is only in the lead.
The major obstacle to this getting to GA or FA is that much of the article is unreferenced. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
Per WP:CITE the book sources need more information (publisher, date, pages). The one internet ref seems to be a dead link - it needs URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:V too
The article is very list-y and needs a copyedit. If possible can lists be converted to text?
I would add some background on the Buffalo Soldiers so the nickname and history of predecessor units is clearer.
Per WP:MOS#Images, images should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to take over. For portrait format images, "upright" can be used to make the image narrower.
There is a free image of Baker that could be used here.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch poeer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 23:52, 19 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]