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A. K. Fazlul Huq edit

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Result: Delist endorsed per consensus. PeterSymonds | talk 10:54, 21 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The reviewer has delisted the aricle on the grounds that it does not have inline citation and the prose is poor. The article uses Harvard referencing which is an acceptable style of inline citation. The prose may not be FA worthy but it is reasonably clear and I believe free from grammatical / spelling problem. If not, the reviewer should at least point out a few grammatical / spelling problems that (s)he notices. Arman ^(Talk) 10:19, 12 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

There are no inline citations at all that I can see and parts are almost hagiographical. The prose can also do with plenty of improvemnt. imo, lack of inline citations itself is a killer. Not GA-worthy. Sarvagnya 04:34, 13 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It looks like the referencing style may be appropriate, but the article has quite noticeable prose issues. Here are some random examples of sentences with grammatical errors:
- "Fazlul Huq got initiation in politics in the hands of Sir Khwaja Salimullah and Syed Nawab Ali Chowdhury" - got initiation? in the hands of?
- "In 1919 Fazlul Huq joined the Khilafat movement. But he had a difference of opinion about non-cooperation with mainstream Congress leaders." - The second sentence is a bit disconnected from the first, since the article fails to provide us with background information about the Khilafat movement.
- "This difference of opinion eventually made him leave Congress" - awkwardly phrased
- "Fazlul Huq led a very simple personal life" - what do you mean by "simple"?
- Inconsistencies in referring to the subject; he's been called Fazlul Huq, Huq, Sher-e-Bangla A. K. Fazlul Huq, and Sher-e-Bangla. Stick with his last name only (Lul).
- Inconsistent date linking per MoS.
- Commas would be appropriate after "For 1913-1916", "In 1917" and "and in 1918-1919".
I've only combed through a tenth of the article and these are the mistakes I've found. I bet if I continue looking, I will find more mistakes. Nishkid64 _{(Make articles, not love)} 04:41, 13 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A few other things; he is referred to with a different name in different parts of the article...eg. I see "Sher-e-Bangla A. K. Fazlul Huq was the key...", "led by Huq", "Fazlul Huq got initiation", etc. Also a broadness issue; Huq's policies in government aren't really discussed, just a "history" so to speak is presented. dihydrogen monoxide (H₂O) 05:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Don't list - The article lacks details on what policies Huq implemented when he was in power. For six years he was the leader of Bengal, which is about 1/6th of the whole Indian subcontinent, and there are only two lines on this. He was later governor of the East Pakistan, which is now one of the ten most populous countires in the world, but there is only 1-2 sentences on his rule at this time. Furthermore the prose has many, many grammar mistakes, and also there was one unreliable source being used. The Muktadara website [1] allows for other people to contribute and declares itself to be "open". These things are not reliable sources. Furthermore, the website allows people only to contribute if they have a certain POV, which causes POV problems: " The participants are expected to respect .... our great war of independence". Blnguyen (vote in the photo straw poll) 05:29, 13 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Endorse de-listing. H2O made the right call. The article fails WP:LEAD and lacks in-line citations. Further, the article needs to be copy-edited. The good news is that with a little work the article will be ready to re-nominate at GAN. Majoreditor (talk) 04:09, 15 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]