Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Salman Khan filmography/archive1
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The list was promoted by Crisco 1492 14:37, 8 March 2015 [1].
Salman Khan filmography edit
Salman Khan filmography (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)
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Here is my fourth filmography and this one is about a mainstream actor of Hindi cinema. Like the other three, it is well-sourced and well-written. Criticism on my work and suggesting improvements will be appreciated. FrankBoy (Buzz) 11:29, 23 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved concerns from SNUGGUMS
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Here's my 2¢:
Pretty good list overall Snuggums (talk / edits) 20:27, 26 February 2015 (UTC)[reply] |
Support looks good now :) Snuggums (talk / edits) 22:37, 26 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Support — This is a good list. My only query is that you might want to archive the references to prevent dead links. — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 07:18, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you for the support. I have not archived the links yet. I will probably do it sometime later. --FrankBoy (Buzz) 08:40, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments from Krimuk90
- In the first two sentences the word "film" appears thrice. The first and third occurrences are redundant IMO.
- You don't make a "breakthrough role", you either have a breakthrough (or make a breakthrough) in something or by doing something.
- "He starred in several films,.." No context. I think you mean in the early 1990s.
- " Khan suffered a brief setback in his film career with several Hindi films" He has acted only in Hindi films, so why repeat "Hindi films" here?
- "with several Hindi films, ..., none of which fared well commercially." There is no link between these parts of the sentence. Please rephrase.
- Please begin a new paragraph by mentioning the subject by his last name.
- Would be interesting to mention that Andaaz Apna Apna was a commercial failure. That would better explain the "now" in the sentence.
- "played the titular role"
- "Karan Arjun (1995), which emerged as the year's second highest-grossing Hindi film.". Which year? It's not mentioned before.
- Krimuk90, 1995 is mentioned in the parenthesis.
- Oops, my bad.
- Why is KKHH described as a dramedy? It's always cited as a romantic drama.
- "In 1999, Khan starred in three critically and commercially successful productions; the comedy Biwi No.1, the romantic drama Hum Dil De Chuke Sanam, and the family drama Hum Saath-Saath Hain.". The three films were hits, yes, but baring Hum Dil none of them were critically acclaimed. Infact Biwi No. 1 and Hum Saath Saath Hain received negative reviews.
- Please change "goon" to something more formal.
- Surely there's a better way to describe his role in Baghbaan than an "adopted orphan"?
- Why is there a critic review for Tere Naam in his filmography page?
Why not? His performance in the film is considered one of his best, so I think there is no harm to mention a critic review.
- Well, if we have a source that says his role was critically acclaimed, then we can add that. But adding one from a critic like Taran Adarsh who dishes out superlative reviews for almost every actor is completely unnecessary in a filmography page. In his biography, of course, that will have much more significance. -- KRIMUK90 ✉ 02:06, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Hmm, you seem to be right. Anyways, I have removed the review. How about this one, Krimuk90? Sify is a very good source according to me. --FrankBoy (Buzz) 06:21, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]- I really don't think it's necessary to have a critic review in his filmography page, especially for an actor who has done such a wide range of work. Others might weigh in their opinion here.
- Well, if we have a source that says his role was critically acclaimed, then we can add that. But adding one from a critic like Taran Adarsh who dishes out superlative reviews for almost every actor is completely unnecessary in a filmography page. In his biography, of course, that will have much more significance. -- KRIMUK90 ✉ 02:06, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- "He played protagonists in several top-grossing Hindi films:". You can say, he went on to play the lead role in...
- "the second instalment of the Dabangg film series" -- KRIMUK90 ✉ 09:51, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for the comments. I have resolved all of the above. As for his role in Baghbaan, I can not think of anything else at the moment as his role was not more than of a 20 minute appearance. I think that we can have something like "a child who stands by his parents" or "appeared briefly". What do you think? --FrankBoy (Buzz) 11:12, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Note: User Ssven2 has changed the info. as "made a brief appearance", which is certainly better than "adopted orphan". No? --FrankBoy (Buzz) 17:53, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Note: I have made quite a few tweaks to the lead in this revision, and will now abstain from either supporting or opposing the nomination. Anyway, I think the lead is much improved now. Good luck! :) -- KRIMUK90 ✉ 01:50, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Support: My only suggestion is to remove the red links unless you plan to make articles of that topic yourself. Other than that, it looks fine to me.
- --Birdienest81 (talk) 03:02, 8 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Closing note: This candidate has been Promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FLC/ar, and leave the {{featured list candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:29, 8 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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