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The list was promoted by Giants2008 10:01, 29 July 2013 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of works by Chairil Anwar edit

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Nominator(s):  — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:37, 16 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because it meets the criteria. Unlike our just featured poet, Amir Hamzah, Chairil was diligent in dating his works. He was less diligent, however, in actually ensuring they were his works: a couple were blatant (and uncredited) translations, which can be seen in the tables. Despite this and his relatively low output, he is credited with essentially revolutionising poetry in Indonesia: he has been called both "Indonesia's greatest literary figure" and "the perfect poet". — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:37, 16 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from CassiantoTalk 00:09, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Minor comments from Cassianto
  • Anwar, a notorious womaniser, died at age 27; several sources suggest syphilis as the cause of his death. – Could we get away with a pronoun at the start of this sentence?
  • Would you be "criticised" for plagerism, or accused of it?
    • It was more or less shown (and that which was caught during Anwar's lifetime was quickly amended), so I wouldn't say "accused" as that implies a chance of being innocent. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:48, 18 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    • Cool thanks. -- CassiantoTalk 00:09, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Who are Teeuw and Raffel?
  • Fixed Teeuw. Raffel is explained in the first paragraph.

Everything else looks pretty good! -- CassiantoTalk 22:11, 18 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from SchroCat (talk) 07:16, 22 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from SchroCat
  • "Anwar's passionate individualism (the line "I want to live another thousand years" from "Aku" is oft-quoted), as the years passed, developed into a feeling of mortality and surrender; ultimately it is difficult, if not impossible, to identify a single theme which unites all of Anwar's work.[7]" This is a big line and it took me a couple of read throughs to get the shape of it. I think it's because of the large bracketed clause in the middle. Perhaps the following (or a variant of it, at least, may serve better?
Anwar possessed a passionate individualism, and the line "I want to live another thousand years" from "Aku" is often quoted. As the years passed, this individualism developed into a feeling of mortality and surrender; ultimately it is difficult, if not impossible, to identify a single theme which unites all of Anwar's work.[7]"
  • Alright, used your wording.
  • "highly multi-interpretable". This may well be right, but it sounds and feels wrong: why not lose the "highly"?

Two very minor quibbles, but very nice! - SchroCat (talk) 21:56, 21 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support: all good as far as I can see. Another excellent piece. - SchroCat (talk) 07:16, 22 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Bloom6132 (talk) 17:48, 26 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Comments –
  • "moved to the capital at Batavia" – remove "at"
  • "There he began mixing with the local literary scene." – mixing? I think a better term would be "immersing himself in" (or any other term you think is better).

—Bloom6132 (talk) 16:07, 26 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support – meets FL criteria. Great work! —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:48, 26 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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