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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by Gimmetrow 03:42, 10 March 2009 [1].

List of individual National Basketball Association scoring leaders

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Nominator(s): —Chris! ct
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Another NBA list written by me. Comments welcomed.—Chris! ct 23:10, 27 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Truco

Comments from Truco (talk · contribs)

Lead
  • The following list individual players who lead the National Basketball Association (NBA) with the highest point per game average in a given season. -- list --> "lists"
  • Both George Gervin and Allen Iverson have clinched four scoring titles in their career[5] while George Mikan, Neil Johnston and Bob McAdoo have clinched it three times. -- Comma before while
List and key
  • Make a section header for the list itself and optionally for the key, if not just place it at the top of the new section.
Opps, I missed this one. Now done.—Chris! ct 02:33, 1 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • The 3-point field-goal made column needs to have its content center aligned like the rest of the list the columns.
  • Remove at least 2 images because they stretch past the notes section, and they should stop beforehand.
Notes
  • Remove the commas from notes B, C, and E they are not complete statements.
References
  • If you're going to link one of the publishers, you may as well link the rest for consistency.

--TRUCO 16:49, 28 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from KV5
Comments from KV5
  • The table, so "by season" in the title is extraneous. Page move needed. - Done
  • Lead sentence "The folowing lists..." - not so much. Reword. Hook me! - I can't think of a better way to say this. Any suggestion?
Done—Chris! ct 23:22, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "who lead" - "who led" - Done
  • "point per game average" - make it points per game and link to here - Done
  • "point per game averaged" - you've already established that it's an average, so just "points per game" will suffice here - Done
  • "also the frist player" - first - Done
  • "in history" - excess, you've already said first player, so remove - Done
  • "He is also the frist player in history to lead both categories as a rookie when he scored 2707 points and averaged 37.6 points in the 1959–60 season." - needs ref - I reword the sentence and got a ref for it
  • "Michael Jordan holds the record for having the most scoring titles, with ten." - either "Michael Jordan has won the most scoring titles, with ten." or "Michael Jordan has won ten scoring titles, more than any other player." - Done
  • "to have seven consecutive scoring titles." - to have won - Done
  • "Both George Gervin and Allen Iverson have clinched four scoring titles in their career,[5] while George Mikan, Neil Johnston and Bob McAdoo have clinched it three times." - clinched used twice in quick succession, and I would remove it altogether to facilitate understanding. Use "won" or "achieved" instead. - Done
  • Positions should be linked in the key - Not done because they all link to basketball position and this link is in the key already
Done—Chris! ct 23:22, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Key should be separated from the table by a level 2 header - Done
  • Table headers: Field goal, 3-point field goal, and free throw - the only dash in there should be 3-point, as shown, and all need to be plural - Done
  • Make all footnotes complete sentences - Is this necessary?
Done—Chris! ct 23:22, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Check out reference 85, I think it should be 1999-2000, not 1990-2000 - Done
  • References need to be formatted consistently. Some access dates are "February 20, 2009", and some are "February 20 2009". Check all. - Done

Hope this helps. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 18:17, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

My replies are in bold. Thanks for reviewing—Chris! ct 19:50, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support. Cheers. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 23:41, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 04:55, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved issues, Dabomb87 (talk)
Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)
  • "highest points per game" "most", not "highest". Alternatively, you could say "highest points per game average".
  • ", both of which were achieved in the 2005–06 season." Change the comma to a semicolon and rephrase to "both records were achieved in the 2005–06 season."
  • "while George Mikan, Neil Johnston"-->and George Mikan, Neil Johnston
  • "have all won"
  • "Only three players "
  • In the last sentence, I think you should link to the season article rather than the NBA finals articles.
Why is this necessary?—Chris! ct 02:48, 4 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Fix the edit bunching.
  • "Denotes the number of times the player has been the scoring leader" This is a bit off but I don't know the best way to rephrase. Maybe " Denotes the number of times the player had been the scoring leader up to and including that season". This is something that needs to be amended in your other lists too.
Done, will do other lists later—Chris! ct 02:48, 4 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • The George Mikan image is fair use and should be removed, as there are plenty of free alternatives of other players. It is not imperative that Mikan be pictured.
  • Image caption: "Kobe Bryant won the scoring titles twice from 2006 to 2007."-->Kobe Bryant won the scoring titles twice in 2006 to 2007. Dabomb87 (talk) 03:15, 3 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
All done—Chris! ct 02:48, 4 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 03:15, 3 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved layout issue
Comment On my screen resolution (1024 x 768), the images in the "Scoring leaders" section push the table down; in other words, they do not go alongside the table, they are above it, right-aligned, and there's a whole lot of white space on the left. Can this be fixed? Noble Story (talk • contributions) 07:53, 5 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I tried to fix it. Does that help?—Chris! ct 17:45, 5 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
At the moment, it is still the same. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 00:29, 6 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
A screen shot would be helpful. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:00, 6 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I think the fix bunching template is causing this problem. I remove them and rearrange the images. See if it looks better.—Chris! ct 03:19, 6 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
No, it's still the same. I guess it can't be fixed. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 04:11, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Ooh, high five! It's fixed (Don't listen to me talking again). Noble Story (talk • contributions) 04:30, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from SRE.K.A.L.24

Comments from -- SRE.K.A.L.24[c]

  • "Wilt Chamberlain holds the all-time records for total points scored (4029) and points per game (50.4)..." that's in a season, right? Also with the Bryant one.
Right—Chris! ct 22:45, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The readers may be confused whether it is all-time, or just the season. Just clarify it by adding "in a season" or something similar. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 23:04, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Although I think "both were achieved in the 1961–62 season." in the sentence "Wilt Chamberlain holds the all-time records for total points scored (4029) and points per game (50.4); both were achieved in the 1961–62 season." already clarify the meaning. But done anyway.
  • "...and Bryant have won the scoring titles twice." have --> have each; titles --> title.
Done—Chris! ct 22:45, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • You could include that O'Neal is the only season scoring leader to have never had a three point field goal in his respective seasons.
I think the lead has enough material already.—Chris! ct 22:45, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Ehh...you could still add it, since it is kind of a fascinating fact. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 23:04, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The reason I don't want to add is because I probably need a ref for it and I am not sure if I can find one for it.—Chris! ct 00:59, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Couldn't the general reference work? -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 01:20, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Don't think so, but I added it anyway.—Chris! ct 01:53, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Abdul-Jabbar did not change his name until after the 1970–71 season. So I think that he should be named Lew Alcindor for his scoring title in 1970–71.
Oh, I forgot that. Now done—Chris! ct 22:45, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

-- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 20:18, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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