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List of colleges and universities in Michigan edit

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Nominator(s): Ruby 2010/2013 02:54, 10 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I've been wanting to expand this one for a while and finally got around to it. This is my sixth colleges list, but there are inevitably things I usually overlook (hopefully nothing too major), so thanks in advance to FLC's sharp-eyed reviewers! Ruby 2010/2013 02:54, 10 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Bald Zebra (Talk) 12:55, 14 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
A few comments to kick things off:
  • There seems to be a bit of overlinking in the lead - for instance I don't think you need to link "colleges", "universities", "U.S. state", "governing board", "accredited", "medical schools" or "multiple agencies", as the meaning of these terms would be obvious for most English-speakers.
  • Following on from the first comment (sort of), "baccalaureate colleges" has been linked twice in the first paragraph.
  • It is linked twice for ease of readers -- one says "baccalaureate colleges" and the other says "baccalaureate/associate's colleges". I'm willing to remove the link if you feel strongly however. Ruby 2010/2013 20:02, 11 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think it'd be best if you did – I don't see the need to have the same link in consecutive sentences, and it seems a bit inaccurate to only have the link to baccalaureate colleges and not associate's colleges. ★ Bald Zebra ★ talk 12:14, 12 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Upon removing the link, I think this was a good call. Thanks for the advice! Ruby 2010/2013 23:19, 13 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Board of Regents of the University of Michigan, a governing board in place since 1817, oversees the University of Michigan system, which comprises three public universities." → "The University of Michigan system (which comprises three public universities) has been overseen by the Board of Regents of the University of Michigan since 1817."
  • "It is also the oldest post-secondary institution in the state, as it was founded in 1817..." - I think you could remove the comma from this sentence.
  • "20 years" → "twenty years" (to keep it consistent with the numbering style used in the first paragraph)
  • Reference #84 (for St Clair County Community College) seems to be having some server problems at the moment. Is there an alternative source available? Failing that, an archived link would work.
  • Hmmm it's working for me but I archived the link just in case. Ruby 2010/2013 20:02, 11 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers, ★ Bald Zebra ★ talk 10:53, 11 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing! Let me know if there is anything else. Ruby 2010/2013 20:02, 11 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - prose is good, everything that should be referenced is referenced, tables are clear and well-formatted with no accessibility problems that I can see. Nice job! ★ Bald Zebra ★ talk 12:55, 14 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 17:44, 25 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • " In addition, eighteen institutions " -> " In addition, there are eighteen institutions ..."
  • " University of Michigan–Ann Arbor" this just redirects to the University of Michigan.
  • What does the X in "X Merged into Cornerstone University" mean?

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:24, 23 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, as always, for reviewing. I have addressed your concerns. Ruby 2010/2013 03:10, 24 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
As ever, you're welcome! The Rambling Man (talk) 17:44, 25 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Crisco 1492 (talk)
*Oakland University William Beaumont School of Medicine - Is this correct, or should it be Oakland University's William Beaumont School of Medicine
  • Agree about overlinking in the lede... can we cut it back a little?
  • Otherwise looks good. Be sure to check my copyedits. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:12, 31 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Thanks for reviewing. Oakland is titled correctly (per their website). The lead's first and second paragraphs don't have excessive overlinking IMO, but I agree that the third has a sea of blue. I can't really take any links out however, as they all pertain to the names of specific schools/accrediting agencies that are useful for readers to click on. Thoughts? Ruby 2010/2013 16:34, 31 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • My only suggestion would be to cut down on the names mentioned... i.e., just state the important ones. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:44, 14 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I've placed the 10 law and medical schools into a note. How does it look now? Ruby 2010/2013 02:07, 14 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support on prose; sorry it took me so long to get back to you, this page somehow fell off my watchlist. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:30, 14 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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