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The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 00:26, 12 April 2024 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of World Heritage Sites in Zimbabwe edit

List of World Heritage Sites in Zimbabwe (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): Tone 10:00, 2 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Zimbabwe has five sites on the list and two tentative sites, so this list is on the shorter side. Standard style. The list for South Africa is already seeing support so I am adding a new nomination. Tone 10:00, 2 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

MPguy2824's comments
  • "One site is transnational, the Mosi-oa-Tunya / Victoria Falls is shared with Zambia." seems a bit odd. you can either replace the comma with a semi-colon OR go with "Mosi-oa-Tunya / Victoria Falls is the only transnational site (it is shared with Zambia).
  • Consider linking "dry season".
  • " In dry season, the floodplains are an important refuge to large mammal communities, including African elephant, hippopotamus, African buffalo, waterbuck, zebra, together with the predators such as lion, leopard, cheetah, as well as Nile crocodile." to " In the dry season, the floodplains are an important refuge to large mammal communities, including the African elephant, hippopotamus, African buffalo, waterbuck, zebra, together with predators such as the lion, leopard, cheetah, as well as the Nile crocodile."
  • "Eastern black rhinoceros lived here at the time of inscription but the remaining animals have since been moved for safekeeping elsewhere." to "Eastern black rhinoceroses used to live here at the time of inscription, but the remaining animals have since been moved for safekeeping elsewhere."
  • Will do a full prose review later. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 10:26, 2 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Thanks! Will wait for a full review before fixing, easier this way :) Tone 15:06, 2 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • with trade links to China, Persia, and Kilwa Kisiwani. Kilwa Kisiwani doesn't seem to as important as the other two large areas. If it is important to keep, then add ", in present-day Tanzania" to the end of that sentence.
  • "abandoned around 1450" to "abandoned around the year 1450"
  • "Like the latter, it was built in dry stone technique in a similar architectural style" to "Like the latter, it was built using the dry stone technique and in a similar architectural style".
  • "and was an important regional centre of trade, with porcelain form China and Spain found among archaeological remains" - split this part into a new sentence and correct "form" to "from".
  • "Along the border between Zimbabwe and Zambia, the Zambezi river creates massive waterfalls, with the width of 1,708 m (5,604 ft) and the maximum height of 108 m (354 ft)." to "Along the border between Zimbabwe and Zambia, the Zambezi river creates a massive waterfall, with a width of 1,708 m (5,604 ft) and a maximum height of 108 m (354 ft).".
  • "Falling water creates" to "The falling water creates".
  • "created in millions of years of erosion" to "created over millions of years of erosion".
  • Wikilink "Kopje".
  • "in different manners" to "in different ways".
  • "the life of foraging people" to "the life of the foraging people". -MPGuy2824 (talk) 10:44, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Fixed all, thanks! I changed the link of Kilwa Kisiwani to the Kilwa Sultanate, since this was a power that ruled most of the east African coast at the time and is thus important. Tone 17:01, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    • "the predators" - remove "the".
    • "Kilwai Sultanate." to "Kilwa Sultanate, on the east coast of Africa."
    • "cut into a basalt rock" - Remove the "a"
    • See MOS:CIRCA and use in all the places where it applies (I noticed 2). -MPGuy2824 (talk) 09:47, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      Done, thanks. I haven't been using the MOS:CIRCA style earlier but it is convenient for future reference :) Tone 15:59, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support on prose and table accessibility. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 09:04, 5 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments edit

  • "Mana Pools are" => "The Mana Pools are"
  • "the floodplains are an important refuge to large mammal communities" => "the floodplains are an important refuge for large mammal communities"
  • "Eastern black rhinoceroses used to lived here" => "Eastern black rhinoceroses used to live here"
  • "Matobo Hills feature" => "The Matobo Hills feature"
  • "representing one of the densest concentration" => "representing one of the densest concentrations"
  • That's it! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:37, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Fixed, thanks! Not sure what are you suggesting with the rhinoceroses? Tone 21:47, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Take the d off the end of "lived" -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:50, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Ah, silly me :D Fixing now. Tone 21:53, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 23:11, 10 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Source review passed; promoting. --PresN 16:30, 11 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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