Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of The Bellflower Bunnies episodes/archive2

The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was not promoted by User:Matthewedwards 02:57, 20 October 2008 [1].

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List of The Bellflower Bunnies episodes

previous FLC (16:14, 8 May 2008)

• Previous peer reviews: 1st (March/April), 2nd (May/June), 3rd (September/October)

In the words of Violette Bellflower/Pirouette Passiflore:

“ Rule #4 of good writing: It takes a lot of rewriting and rethinking. ”

And, after long weeks and months of figuring it out, here I am, about to start what could possibly be my first (and maybe only) featured or good topic. I'm 96% sure that everything has been addressed from the PRs and last FLC.

To borrow a little something from Reginald Lewis: "Why should Simpsons freaks and anime geeks have all the fun?" Well, I'm finally about to take you all on.

Now, give me a triple crown... --Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 14:31, 6 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments - sources look good, links checked out with the link checker tool. Note I was not able to evaluate the non-English sources. Ealdgyth - Talk 13:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments

• Especially in the case of season 2, the order of the broadcast episodes differs drastically from the official sequence provided by Institut National de l'Audiovisuel (INA) and AnimezVous.com. - Why not just say The order of the broadcast episodes for season 2 differ from the official sequence provided by Instit National de I'Audiovisuel (INA) and NimezVous.com. (It gets rid of "especially" and "drastically" as those are in a way WP:POV.
• Not that it is against policy, but IMO is against Cr 1 + 5: the style of how the dates are written are different throughout, they should all be consistent. (I.G. 2002 December and December 2002)
• So there was no English title for episode #8? If not, can a note be given as to why?
• Why doesn't season three have the source for material column, just curious.--S_RX 13:09, 9 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Gary King (talk · contribs)

• Merge some of the paragraphs in the lead; too many small ones.
• "Series overview" – "Overview"
• "Only in Germany have titles been given for all 52 episodes" – "Have titles been given for all 52 episodes in Germany only" – please try to keep sentences passive when possible.
• "Especially in the case of season 2, the order of the broadcast episodes differs drastically from the official sequence provided by Institut National de l'Audiovisuel (INA) and AnimezVous.com." – convert into active voice
• "Series overview" – the paragraphs can be merged together (in a logical manner) also

Gary King (talk) 21:54, 9 October 2008 (UTC)

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