Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of Slipknot concert tours/archive4

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The list was not promoted by The Rambling Man 21:26, 31 January 2011 [1].

List of Slipknot concert tours

Nominator(s): Nergaal (talk) 00:12, 8 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because I think it is close to passing the FL? criteria. Any input would be greatly appreciated. Nergaal (talk) 00:12, 8 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - I had no idea anyone had even edited this article since my last nomination. I'm sure it's really close to meeting the criteria, so I'll post some comments soon. CrowzRSA 06:08, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Another comment You are aware that you haven't listed this on the FLC page, and that's why it hasn't gotten any comments… CrowzRSA 19:01, 17 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose real quick overview...

Image caption should not have a full stop.
"After touring in Livin La Vida Loco.." unclear what this is, and our article calls it "Livin la Vida Loco".
"first international tour, World Domination Tour. After a year-long tour" count the "tour"s. Poor prose, needs work.
"of their second studio" - you've maintained Slipknot is singular up to this point.
"During the tour, Slipknot performed...." replace Slipknot with "the band" for some change in prose.
" All Hope Is Gone in 2008." comma missing before "in"
"Slipknot toured in countries they had never performed in before..." again, Slipknot has become plural, and in any case, this would be "Slipknot toured countries in which they had never performed.."
"drummer Joey Jordison broke one of his ankles and DJ Sid Wilson broke both of his ankles" repetitive and weak prose.
Reference titles - avoid ALL CAPS and ensure all spaced hyphens are en-dashes.
What makes genckolik.net a WP:RS?
Ref 58 says [dead link].

The Rambling Man (talk) 21:37, 19 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It's been a week since I left these notes, and no work being done. I guess if nothing's done in the next few days I'll withdraw this nomination. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:15, 27 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I did a few fixes. I started the nom, but I realized that the list requires more work and I decided not to submit it before I get to work on it. I did not submit it, so feel free to withdraw the nom. Nergaal (talk) 20:32, 28 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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