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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by User:Scorpion0422 23:06, 26 May 2008 [1].

List of Philadelphia Eagles head coaches edit

Well written, it seems to meet all FL criteria. « Milk's Favorite Cookie ( talk / contribs) 21:44, 13 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Gary King (talk · contribs)
Gary King (talk) 18:52, 17 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Unlink text in the bold title, or remove the bold, per WP:BOLDTITLE.
  • Remove italics from the publishers in the references that aren't actually periodicals.

Gary King (talk) 00:13, 14 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved - Noble Story (talk) 02:28, 26 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Noble Story (talk · contribs)
  • Do you need to add "Greasy" to Neale's name?
  • Saying "Andy Reid is the all-time leader in games coached, wins, and in winning percentage with .611" isn't really complete. You should clarify exactly what .611 refers to. The same goes for the next sentence.
  • Maybe you could have an image in the lead? It looks better, just in my opinion.
  • "Of the 20 Eagles coaches, three have been elected into the Pro Football Hall of Fame, including Bert Bell, Greasy Neale, and Wayne Millner." As per WP:MOS#Numbers, you should be consistent in having either figures or words together. Also, if you've already referred to a coach before, no need to put his full name again.
  • "Several former players have been head coach for the Eagles..." Do you mean former NFL players, or former Eagles players? Not really clear.
  • If the MOS says you have to indicate something with colors and another indicator (asterisk, whatever), then you should do so (for the two color keys you use).

Noble Story (talk) 10:20, 15 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

More Comments
  • OK, I think there should be a bold title of some kind in the first sentence.
  • The "established in 1933" part is mentioned twice.
  • Why do you have to say "...three have been elected into the Pro Football Hall of Fame, including..."? You list three coaches, so you don't need "including"
  • Most of all, the prose in the lead is somewhat choppy. None of the sentences have any connecting words, and it makes ready very unsmooth.

Noble Story (talk) 13:38, 20 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Few More Comments
  • Current refs 11 and 13 have statements but no citations to back them up.
  • I think the "Statistics are correct as..." should be made into a small note at the end of the table (as here). Noble Story (talk) 13:58, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • The first sentence, This is a complete list of Philadelphia Eagles head coaches., is basically redundant to the title of the article. Is it possible to make the first sentence more informative, something that would draw a reader in?
  • Needs non-breaking spaces.
  • I'd like to see the lead expanded some.
  • Statistics correct as of December 30, 2007, after the end of the 2007 NFL season. could be worded better.
  • Optional, but I like to see a reference for every coach in the chart.

Good work overall, but there's just a few minor issues. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 16:56, 17 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support All concerns addressed, looks good to me. Noble Story (talk) 02:27, 26 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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