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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by User:Scorpion0422 16:30, 18 November 2008 [1].

List of Milwaukee Brewers managers edit

I am nominating this list to become a Featured List becuase I believe it meets all FL criteria. -NatureBoyMD (talk) 23:02, 3 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved review by SRX
Review by SRX (talk · contribs)/Oppose - fails to meet the standards of writing and their are faults with the table, fails FL cr 1-3,5
Prose
  • The Milwaukee Brewers Major League Baseball franchise has employed 17 managers and 8 general managers (GMs) since its inception in Seattle, Washington as the Seattle Pilots in 1969. - this is the opening lead sentence. In other similar FL's, they state what division they play in, what stadium, where they are from. They don't go directly to the point of the list.
  • Take my suggestions that I pointed out above and then place the prose about them being the Pilots and combine it with the second sentence.
  • Buck Rodgers managed the team in 1981 when the Brewers won the second-half American League East Division title - link to this "half" division title?
  • Rodgers and Harvey Kuenn managed the Brewers in 1982, leading them to win the American League pennant. - so two people managed, both were head managers? Or did one resign and then the other came in, if so that should be elaborated.
  • Phil Garner won 563 games from 1992 to 1999, placing him first on the all-time wins list for Brewers managers. Very confusing at the end and sounds bias, so his 563 ranks him first on "what?"
  • The manager with the highest winning percentage over a full season or more is Harvey Kuenn, whose .576 winning percentage is sixth on the all-time wins list for Brewers managers. - Get to the point, begin with Harvey Kuenn has the highest winning percentage with .576, which is sixth on the all-time wins list for Brewers managers. Also, how is it the highest if he is only sixth?
  • The manager with the highest winning percentage over a full season or more is Harvey Kuenn, whose .576 winning percentage is sixth on the all-time wins list for Brewers managers. - the word "worst" is POV
  • Lead needs to be expanded and better written, the first manager should be listed first, the current manager, and those with the record winning %. See current FLC, List of Tennessee Titans head coaches.
Tables
  • What do the dashes in the # column mean?
  • Source for general managers?
  • Can it be elaborated in the prose the difference between the GM and the head manager?
Notes
  • The awards need to be integrated as a row/column into the table, see the FLC I pointed out above.--SRX 04:15, 4 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Take a look now. Most of the lead was re-written with your suggestions in-mind. I'm not sure what you mean about bullet #3 (about the second-half title). All "Tables" comments were addressed. The way the notes/awards are indicated is standard for other FL of MLB managers. I see no need for this list to buck the trend. -NatureBoyMD (talk) 05:18, 4 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nope. Still has problems
  • The beginning of the sentence states they are in the national league but of what the MLB or the AL?
  • So where is the home stadium?
  • Ken Macha, former manager of the Oakland Athletics is the team's current manager; he will manage his first Brewers game when the 2009 season begins. - this should go at the end of the paragraph, needs to be in chronological order. + comma after Athletics. Since his first game will be until 2009, I recommend adding a {{future}} template.
  • The team's first manager was Joe Schultz. Buck Rodgers managed the team in 1981 when the Brewers won the American League second-half East Division title. - you need a transition. Wow, Shultz was the first manager, so what? Elaborate more on him, or transclude from there to the next sentence. In the second sentence, wikilink to that title?
  • Still no explanation for the emdash in the tables under the "#" row.--SRX 15:05, 4 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Indicated Nat'l League of MLB & home stadium, fixed Macha, added {{future}}, worked on Schultz sentence, added em dash explanation to table key. -NatureBoyMD (talk) 16:50, 4 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Final Comments
  • Buck Rodgers managed the team in 1981 when the Brewers won the American League second-half East Division title. - I remember reviewing a list in this nature where there were half champions and it elaborated why they were half champs, can that be elaborated here?
  • The ref for the GM's should be made into a General one since the same one verifies all of them, possibly into a separate row or indicated below the table.
  • Also, seeing the size of the table, is there a way to place the GM table next to the Manager's table?--SRX 18:34, 4 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I added a bit about the 1981 Major League Baseball strike being the reason for the splist season. I removed the references column for the GMs, and put it under the "General" references section. I tried putting the tables next to each other, but (on my 1024x768 display in IE) the managers table was squeezed such that it became visually unpleasing. Also, the current layout is standard for other MLB manager FLs. -NatureBoyMD (talk) 22:08, 4 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Weak Support - My review was addressed to meet WP:FL?, but I feel that the article should have been peer reviewed before coming here due to the many prose and misc. issues I pointed out above.--SRX 00:53, 6 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments - sources look okay, links checked out with the link checker tool. Ealdgyth - Talk 17:58, 4 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support Meets FL criteria. Dabomb87 (talk) 23:32, 11 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • My only suggestion is to find another picture or two?
  • I Support this candidate. -- SatyrTN (talk / contribs) 20:50, 15 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'd love to add more pictures too, but free images just can't be found. -NatureBoyMD (talk) 00:53, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved review by SRX

Comments --

  • Generally it looks good. I did add a column for league championships/pennants won, since that is a critical item in assessing a manager's career, even if he lost the WS that year. Rlendog (talk) 17:20, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The one thing I think needs to be addressed is a little bit of confusion in the lead over which league the Brewers play in. It starts by saying the Brewers play in the National League, but then the 2nd paragraph mentions winning the American League east, and then goes back to discuss the National League again. I think the lead needs to clarify the Brewers' situation with respect to changing leagues. Perhaps a 2nd sentence could be added to note that the Brewers played in the American League until 1998, when they were moved to the National League.
  • Additional pictures would be nice, but there don't seem to be any relevant free ones available on Commons, so I don't think that should impact the articles' assessment. Of course, it would be good to get a free picture of Ken Macha in a Brewers uniform added to the article as soon as possible. Rlendog (talk) 17:20, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Done. - I added a sentence very similar to the one you suggested. I think the situation has been clarified. I'd love to add more pictures too, but free images just can't be found. -NatureBoyMD (talk) 00:53, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - My issues have been addressed. Rlendog (talk) 01:07, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Killervogel5
Comments (KV5)
  • If there have been no managers elected to the Hall of Fame, it doesn't belong in the key.
  • First sentence: "The Milwaukee Brewers Major League Baseball (MLB) franchise of the National League has employed 17 managers and 8 general managers (GMs) during its 40 seasons of play."→"The Milwaukee Brewers franchise of Major League Baseball's (MLB) National League has employed 17 managers and eight general managers (GMs) during its 40 seasons of play."
    • This change should not be done Do not change 8 to eight; per MOSNUM, comparative quantities should all be written the same way. Dabomb87 (talk) 17:39, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • My fault, this didn't come up in either the Phillies or Twins managers FLC; however, that's not the only change to be made here; the other half still needs to be fixed. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 21:47, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Playing their home games at Miller Park is extraneous to the first paragraph of the lead - remove.
  • "the lowest winning percentage over a season or more is .395 by the team's first manager Joe Schultz." - add comma after .395.
  • Italicize Macha and his record until the 2009 season starts, to indicate that he has not yet managed the team.
  • Needs a reference either with Harvey Kuenn or in the key to show the source for Milwaukee Walk of Fame.
  • I know it's just one redlink, but any chance of creating even a tiny stub for Dean Taylor?
  • Any chance of creating a GM template either? (see List of Philadelphia Phillies managers)
  • You note in the key that em-dashes are used to denote prior service as manager, yet you also use them for blanks in the playoffs. I suggest removing that line from the key and following the format used in the above Phillies list or List of Minnesota Twins managers, wherein a footnote is used to explain em-dashes in the "#" column.
  • Playoff rows should be complete; that is, where a manager has appeared in the playoffs, 0s should be used in place of an em-dash if a manager has won 0 pennants or 0 World Series championships.

Hope this helps. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:26, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Excellent work. Support. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 21:24, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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