Weak Oppose/Comments from Truco (talk · contribs) - due to the sourcing and a couple prose problems.
- Lead
- The proper acronym for the United States is "U.S." not US.
- Its now acceptable. --Efe (talk) 05:00, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Says who?--TRUCO 21:57, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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- Thanks for the supporting comment. I have also given him a link just below this one. --Efe (talk) 00:44, 5 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- In 2004, 13 acts each achieved a first US number-one single, either as a lead artist or featured guest, namely: Sleepy Brown, Twista, Kanye West, Jamie Foxx, Lil Jon, Fantasia Barrino, Juvenile, Soulja Slim, Terror Squad, Ciara, Petey Pablo, Snoop Dogg, and Pharell. - 1)namely should be "most notably" 2)13 acts achieved their first U.S. single, however, you stated "most notably" as if you were only going to list a few, but you listed all of them, so this should be reworded 3)If you are to list them all, list them in alphabetical order
- Its not randomly listed; its based on whose single first topped the chart. But it could be alphabetized, too. A mere editorial preference. --Efe (talk) 05:00, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I never said they were randomly listed, I said that the way the sentence is worded makes it seem like you are going to list only a few of those 13, yet you list all 13, which is why I stated that the sentence should be reworded accordingly. Its not a editorial preference, its unprofessional for them to be in any random order.--TRUCO 21:57, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I think its in MoS, or some MoS guys. --Efe (talk) 23:57, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- So what do you suggest now? --Efe (talk) 23:56, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- It's not in the MOS, its a standard of other FLs as well, because its unprofessional to list the people in any random order. In addition, reword accordingly as I mentioned above.--TRUCO 00:50, 4 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Here, I trimmed it: "In 2004, 13 acts each achieved a first US number-one single, either as a lead artist or featured guest, including Fantasia Barrino, Ciara, Jamie Foxx, Lil Jon, Petey Pablo, Pharell and Kanye West." Sorry about the MoS thing. That was supposed to respond question number one. --Efe (talk) 03:40, 4 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- That's fine. But like I stated in my first point, US is not correct, its "U.S." (the proper acronym).--TRUCO 04:13, 4 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- U.S. is the original acronym but US has generally been used nowadays: Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style#Acronyms_and_abbreviations. --Efe (talk) 05:30, 4 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- During the year, seven collaboration singles reached number-one position. - add "the" before reached
- You mean this: "During the year, seven collaboration singles the reached number-one position." Perhaps you mean "During the year, seven collaboration singles reached the number-one position." But I think its meaningfully the same as "During the year, seven collaboration singles reached number-one position." --Efe (talk) 05:00, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm sorry, I did mean the latter.--TRUCO 21:57, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Barrino and Ciara were the only acts to have earned number-one debut single this year. - add an "a" before number-one debut
- Fixed as suggested. --Efe (talk) 05:00, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- R&B singer Usher had four number-one singles that appeared in the 2004 issues, and Outkast had two. - issues? You mean "charts"?
- Issues refer to the charts, as explained in the above part of the lead. --Efe (talk) 05:13, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Usher's "Yeah!" is the longest-running number-one single of 2004, staying at that position for 12 straight weeks. - it would be better stated as Usher's "Yeah!" is the longest-running number-one single of 2004, remaining in that position for 12 straight weeks
- Other singles with extended chart run include Ciara "Goodies", which features Petey Pablo, and Usher's "My Boo", which features Alicia Keys, each topping the chart for seven and six weeks, respectively. - Ciara should be "Ciara's"
- Oops, fixed now. --Efe (talk) 05:13, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- He had four singles that topped the Billboard Hot 100, namely: "Yeah!, "Burn", "Confessions Part II", and "My Boo"; he is the only act in 2004 to have earned multiple number-one singles. - namely is being misused here, it should be a related phrase to "most notably"
- I don't like to use that because its tends to be POVic. Also, when you say most notably, you only mentioning part of the entire list. In this case, I mentioned the four singles. --Efe (talk) 05:13, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- The feat broke the record set by Glenn Miller and His Orchestra; in 1940, their records spent 26 consecutive weeks at the top spot of Record Buying Guide, a jukebox chart Billboard magazine published in the late 1930s and early '40s. - the semi colon should be after 1940 (so replace that comma with the semi colon)
- Either way, they convey the same meaning. But I fixed it as suggested. --Efe (talk) 05:13, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Chart history
- References
- Only one publishing source is being used, which is a primary source. Third party sources should be found to include more variety in the referencing.--TRUCO 04:15, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Most of its FL precedents use only Billboard magazine as source. --Efe (talk) 05:26, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Those were probably promoted before the FL sourcing criteria was strictly enhanced. See WP:PSTS.--TRUCO 21:57, 3 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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- That list has references to other sources as well, not just Billboard.TRUCO 00:50, 4 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- This sourcing issue is the only thing keeping me from supporting.--TRUCO 22:49, 4 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I have added one from MTV but I will still try to search for more. --Efe (talk) 00:45, 5 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Try searching newspapers, magazines, or other published work online.--TRUCO 02:07, 5 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I am actually reluctant to add some more non-Billboard sources because everything are well sourced. --Efe (talk) 02:25, 5 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I know what you mean, but this is an issue also brought up at FAC per WP:PSTS. With at least two non-primary sources, the list will be fine. Variety is just needed.--TRUCO 02:30, 5 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- OK, I understand. --Efe (talk) 02:34, 5 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Added two non-Billboard sources to support one line there. --Efe (talk) 03:33, 5 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Perfect.--TRUCO 21:54, 5 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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