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The list was promoted by The Rambling Man via FACBot (talk) 00:25, 11 June 2020 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of Formula One Grand Prix wins by Sebastian Vettel edit

List of Formula One Grand Prix wins by Sebastian Vettel (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): MWright96 (talk) 14:59, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

This list is about a German racing driver called Sebastian Vettel, who is a four-time Formula One world champion with 53 race victories over a 12-year career. I believe that the list complies with the featured list criteria and submit this list for all constructive criticism. MWright96 (talk) 14:59, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from ChrisTheDude (talk) 18:45, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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  • "Vettel moved to the Ferrari team in 2015, twice finishing the championship runner-up" - I would say "Vettel moved to the Ferrari team in 2015, twice finishing as championship runner-up"
  • "His first Grand Prix win came in the rain affected" - need a hyphen in rain-affected
  • "In the next two years with Ferrari, he won five races in both years and one in 2019" - this reads really weirdly, because the first clause refers to two years but then the second clearly refers to three.
  • "ahead of second-placed of Ferrari driver Fernando Alonso," - don't think that second "of" is needed
  • "Race number in Vettel's Formula One career; for example "50" signifies Vettel's 50th Formula One race." - pedantic, I know, but it seems odd that the example number is 50, which doesn't actually appear in the table.
  • Don't need the comma before "respectively" in the note.
  • Think that's it from me, great work overall! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:30, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comment from Dey subrata

There is only one suggestion, it would be good if you add ref. 1 and 10 as external links too seeing the importance and number of times the references used, and also the scope of future improvement and for further research. Dey subrata (talk) 05:41, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • Source review – The reliability and formatting of the sources look fine, and the link-checker tool doesn't indicate any problems. I'd say this sourcing review is a pass. Giants2008 (Talk) 22:43, 2 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • "and becoming the youngest driver to score a world championship point in Formula One." - change and becoming to 'to become, to avoid WP:NOUNING
  • "Vettel was signed to race for Toro Rosso..." I'd just say 'Vettel joined Toro Rosso' makes the sentence flow better
  • "...was the youngest two, three and four-time world champion in history." Do we have a ref for this?
  • "His first Grand Prix win came in the rain-affected 2008 Italian Grand Prix on 14 September, becoming the youngest driver..." change the comma after September to a semi-colon and replace becoming with 'he became' to avoid the NOUN+ing structure
  • "His first season with Red Bull in 2009 saw him win four races and finish runner-up to Jenson Button in the points standings." -> He won four races in his first season with Red Bull in 2009 to finish runner-up to Jenson Button.
  • "His 2013 season included 13 Grand Prix victories, equalling seven-time world champion Michael Schumacher's record of most wins in a season." change equalling to which equalled and change the of after Michael Schumacher's record to for.
  • Again, change equalling to 'to equal'
  • Change note a to "The current holder of this record is Max Verstappen who finished seventh at 2015 Malaysian Grand Prix when he was 17 years, 180 days old.
  • Likewise, change note b to "The current holder of this record is Max Verstappen who won the 2016 Spanish Grand Prix when he was 18 years, 228 days old. Only link to Verstappen in the first note too.

That's all from me. I've copyedited some of the image captions to make them flow better as well. NapHit (talk) 16:33, 3 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to support now my concerns have been addressed. NapHit (talk) 18:14, 3 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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