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List of Formula One Grand Prix wins by Alain Prost edit

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Nominator(s): Harrias talk 09:54, 28 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Until Michael Schumacher broke his record in 2001, Alain Prost had won the most Formula One Grands Prix. He won 51 in total, on his way to four world championship titles. He also developed a famous rivalry with Ayrton Senna that got quite nasty at times. This list follows the style of existing FLs, List of Formula One Grand Prix wins by Michael Schumacher and List of Formula One Grand Prix wins by Ayrton Senna. I have an open FLC, but it has three supports and no outstanding concerns. As always, all feedback gratefully received. Harrias talk 09:54, 28 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from ChrisTheDude (talk) 18:02, 28 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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  • "each of which he won at five times" => "at each of which he won five times"
    • Changed to "at both of which he won five times." Harrias talk 17:58, 28 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "won 9 races at Renault, 7 at Williams and 5 at Ferrari" - I would say either "with" or "for" each team. Saying "at" makes it sound like Renault, etc, are places.
  • Also, shouldn't those numbers be written as words, given that they are less than ten?
  • Ref 3 lists no work/publisher
  • That's all I could pick up - great work! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 17:44, 28 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:49, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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A WikiCup submittable review.

  • "in 1980 with" not keen on the easter eggs. At the least I think you should write out the first one fully.
Expanded the first to "1980 season". Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Image caption needs a full stop.
Added. Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • McLaren is mentioned six times in the first five sentences, mildly repetitive.
Trimmed some mentions. Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "world championship with" plural.
Sorted. Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • " featured particularly notable race incidents and collisions occurring between the two" probably no need at all for "particularly notable".
Removed. Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He missed out on the world championship in 1990 " quick repeat of "in 1990", maybe "that season" instead?
Changed. Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • A little odd for me, you cover his world titles before his first win, yet this article is about his wins. I wonder if it'd be better the other way round.
The intention was to summarise Prost himself, before going into detail on the wins. I take it that you don't feel that it works? Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "won seven races in 1993 to win" won .. to win... again, a bit repetitive.
Changed to "won seven races in 1993 to claim" Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • ", at both of which he won five times" maybe "winning five times at both"?
I mean, that does sound like it was written in English, so sure... Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • You could mention that he won one of his races by a mere fraction of a second?
It was a team 1–2 though, and I'm pretty sure that it was team orders to hold position, so there isn't much relevance to the margin. Harrias talk 10:01, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Autodromo Nazionale Monza" our article calls it "Autodromo Nazionale di Monza"
Fixed. Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not sure Phoenix Street Circuit should be thus capitalised, it's just a "street circuit" in Phoenix, not like a track.
Fixed. Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Circuit Zandvoort" doesn't need to be piped to a redirect back to itself.
Got the pipe the wrong way around, sorted. Harrias talk 09:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 13:45, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Cheers, replied to each above. Harrias talk 16:07, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
It looks good. I'm ambivalent about the ordering of the first two paras. Certainly if I'm the only one noting it, so I'm happy to cap and support. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:48, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from MWright96 (talk) 10:09, 16 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Comments from MWright96

  • Be consistent in how you spell the word teammate. For example it is spelt as teammate in the first paragraph whereas it is spelt as team-mate twice in the second paragraph
  • Done, converted all to "teammate". Harrias talk 09:08, 16 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "but fell out with the team," - maybe briefly explain Prost fell out with Renault?
  • "Prost won four times in 1989 as he won the world championship for the third time," - try to avoid repetition of the word "won" too closely
  • Changed second instance to "claimed". Harrias talk 09:08, 16 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He missed out on the world championship that season after Senna intentionally crashed into him during the final race of the season." - repetition of the word "season"
  • "after Senna intentionally crashed into him during the final race of the season." - If I can recall it was the penultimate race of the season. Also the F1 Hall of Fame source incorrectly states this. Please find another reliable source that backs up the statement in bold.

That was all I could find. Nice work! MWright96 (talk) 13:46, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Thanks for the review, I have responded to each point above. Harrias talk 09:08, 16 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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  • "he set a new record for the most Grand Prix wins..." I would link to List of Formula One Grand Prix winners from most Grand Prix wins.
  • No need to do this, but you could move the pictures on the right side of the screen up to the first table. Just feels a bit odd to have them halfway down.

Other than this, I can't find any other faults, Fantastic work as always Harrias! NapHit (talk) 18:03, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers NapHit. I have linked the first, as suggested. I haven't moved the images, because on my laptop monitor the table is too wide to have pictures next to it. Harrias talk 18:15, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
No worries Harrias, that explains why the images are further down. Happy to support now my minor quibble has been addressed. NapHit (talk) 18:16, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Source review passed (removed unneeded publisher params (e.g. the ESPN website is published by ESPN inc.); promoting. --PresN 03:19, 28 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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